Spinal

Spinal

A Poem by Ellie Howard
"

Yet again i make up words.

"

It cracked my spine; it engulfed me asunder

Into a blue raging fury, new to my pallid eyes.

The fury swept oceanically into my gaze

And lifted me above the stones hidden under a gray sheath.

Demurely sensual to my ears,

The waves cast high above my blue laced bastion,

And settled abruptly beneath my feet

As I fell to my knees.

The rocks cracked my spine, severing the nerve.

My eyes bathed in a new white light

As my baptism lingered under the water.   

© 2012 Ellie Howard


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absalutly amazing! The imagery is just perfect. the metaphors are excellent. and the way you picked out extodinary words, I love it! my favorite line was " The fury swept oceanically into my gaze, and lifted me above the stones hidden under a gray sheath." pure fantasy indeed!
great work my friend.
100/100

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Very powerful. The imagery is fantastic. The last three lines are my favorite. Well done. I can close my eyes and picture the whole thing.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I can imagine the scenery and the pain so well. This was definitely a good read!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Anything to do with the spinal is painful. The poem was painful to read. Good description make the injury come to life. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

absalutly amazing! The imagery is just perfect. the metaphors are excellent. and the way you picked out extodinary words, I love it! my favorite line was " The fury swept oceanically into my gaze, and lifted me above the stones hidden under a gray sheath." pure fantasy indeed!
great work my friend.
100/100

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

very nice image you have drawn here. i felt the pain of it. very nice words picking and exciting metaphors. i have really enjoyed reading it..

thank you for sharing

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is absolutely wonderful!
You always use such unique and outstanding imagery and metaphors
You have an incredible way with words
Good job

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Ellie Howard
Ellie Howard

San Antonio, TX



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I'm 16 years old, and i'm in love with writing and literacy education. Writing is one of the only ways, besides my art, where i can express how i feel with confidence. Even though i'm not the religio.. more..

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