GOODBYE

GOODBYE

A Poem by Ellen Hammond

Away!  Away!

Be gone!  I say.

Come by this way no more.

 

Do you not see

Eternally

Flew quickly out the door?

 

Guess I could show

How much I know

If I was keeping score.

 

Just tell my why.

Kindly don’t lie

Like you have done before.

 

My heart is broke.

No!  It’s no joke

Our oath meant nothing more.

 

Perhaps I’ll shout,

Quietly pout,

Rant, rage, and slam the door.

 

See now my dear,

There’s much to fear.

Until I even the score.

 

Vows you did make

Were clearly fake

X-mate you’ll be for sure.

 

You cheat and lie.

Zip up your fly!

And learn to value more.


© 2013 Ellen Hammond



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This strikes me a very violent. Should read again and find out why.
It is just not where I thought you were-- very outspoken--- an honest feeling.
-- Eagle Cruagh

Posted 9 Months Ago


Ellen Hammond

9 Months Ago

Did you figure out why it strikes you that way? I wrote this a few years ago, but I don't remember .. read more
Eagle Cruagh

9 Months Ago

I think the reason I sensed violence in your poem was not that at all.
You were probably just.. read more
very beautiful ellen strong are we when we believe we are weak but the repairs it's self

Posted 9 Months Ago


Ellen Hammond

9 Months Ago

Thank you.
Thanks for telling it like it is. The last verse speaks volumes!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ellen Hammond

3 Years Ago

Thanks Susie Q. This just sort of came to me when I was try to think of a different way to write a.. read more
Susie Q

3 Years Ago

Sounded good to me.
Ellen Hammond

3 Years Ago

Thanks! Glad you liked it.
WOW, this is a new type for you. Here I am wishing for my honey back and then come across this. I almost had to chuckle..Cutely written..love Valentine

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ellen Hammond

3 Years Ago

Thanks. It is a new type for me indeed and since I've been single for years, I'm not sure where it .. read more
Valentine

11 Months Ago

Ellen just stumbled across this again and NO, I did not notice it was in abcde order. Kathie Neat.. read more
"Vows you did make

Were clearly fake

X-mate you’ll be for sure.



You cheat and lie.

Zip up your fly!

And learn to value more."

A kind of rave and rant with some harsh words. Splendid...:).


Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ellen Hammond

3 Years Ago

Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it.
Sami Khalil

3 Years Ago

Yep. You are welcome...:)......................
The short punchy lines make it an amusing poem. Makes the very emotional and serious subject whimsical. If that's the tone you were attempting then you did well!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ellen Hammond

4 Years Ago

Thanks for taking time to post a review! This poem just came to me when as I was thinking of trying.. read more
lMarling

4 Years Ago

Wow, didn't even realize it was abecederian. Wonderful!
Ellen Hammond

4 Years Ago

Thank you! It is nice to hear that as many acrostics or 'alphabet' poems are very obvious and often.. read more

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Added on June 26, 2013
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Ellen Hammond
Ellen Hammond

Saint John, N.B., Bay of Fundy , Canada



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