Love & H2O

 

 

 

 

Love resembles H2O,

As its patient ebb and flow,

Smooths a jagged heart of stone.

Inner beauty thus is shown.

 

Inner beauty, in its turn

Incites passion's sultry burn

Love and lust commingled, rise

Vapor forms before our eyes

 

Vapor raptured, unaware

The onset of Arctic air

Erose edges once more form

From thick ice of wintry storm

 

Ice-packed heart is numbed to pain

'Til warm waters stream again

When embraced by H2O

Beware of the undertow

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This was wonderful and witty, I love it! It has a hint of humor mixed in with the seriousness of the subject. I always have great admiration for that. It reminds of life because some great wit once said God is the greatest comedian of all playing to an audience who are afraid to laugh. I do hope that poor heart thaws out again! Who knows? Maybe it will be warm enough to break the ice! lol

[there is no more from m..]

I liked this poem It rhymed and had a nice flow to it weel done

[Wicahpi]

Oh this is so sweet, I really like it!!
Perfectly rhymed and the flow is sweet.
Thank you for entering this little gem into
my Poetry of Love contest!! Good Luck!

[Dusty]

I love this piece... It flows perfectly and has amazing word choice. This is a very inspiring and enlightening poem, full of hope even after pain... Well written! :)

[Susan]

very different poem. enjoyed the imagery that you present here. Great poem.

[Ladysue]

This is clever, unique and artfully done...Outstanding work...

[deeps]

I thought this was an amazing write here. I like this write.

[Katie]

The imagery is stunning in this piece. I really believe you can't live life without some form of love. Keep writting!!

Love resembles H2O,
As its patient ebb and flow,

--You are so very talented. Keep writting!!

[bob, small b. aka invs]

sorry it's taken so long to get around to reading this. i very much like the analogy of love and water. it shows love as something as elemental as water, fire and air. nicely done.

[cest la vie]

I love this piece.. The imagery you used is wonderful.
Yes, we must let that frozen heart thaw so the warm airs of love can flow again. A beautiful piece..

[:)]

I love this analogy :) Sometimes the waves of love feel good but can instantly bring us down with a stroke in the wrong direction. The flow of this poem makes me smile too. It compliments your words elegantly :)