The Hour of Possession

The Hour of Possession

A Poem by Eloha
"

every emotion is an adaptation of what the world has already felt

"




Take me now while it's still early

While your skin is a milky unknown

Substance to my hands, take me

 

With a thousand dawns on your lips

Blazing with a silent hour of you & I

Take me, now while it's still dark

 

And all the best of who we are

Is yet to come, take me then

As a gift that rings on laughter's lips

 

A bright sandal of springtime !

Take me until my eyes grow pink

With the artistry of our first months

 

Today, not tomorrow, Love,

Make me your climbing ray's gladdest song

Take me now, while the day is still young

 

While spring is about to blossom

Like Two rubies struck by an opal light. 

© 2013 Eloha


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A beautiful write, my friend. I think it was a very intelligent decision to use the repetition of the words "Take me", it gave this one a different feel. I imagine you are speaking of the coming together of lovers, but metaphorically, this could mean something larger. I quite enjoyed the word play of this one, and the beauty in the small sacrifices. Nicely done.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Eloha

11 Years Ago

Today I'm in class and I got a book of Amy Lowell, I'm convinced you write somewhat like her in that.. read more
Eloha

11 Years Ago

Yes always a metaphor for something I seek that can never find...
Girl Friday (Sarah W.)

11 Years Ago

Haven't read her...I'll have to pick something up by her and see how accurate you are :)



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Beautiful and full of passionate description and filled with spoken desire.

Posted 5 Years Ago


You turn some beautiful phrases here, Eloha. The whole has a dreamy ethereal atmosphere. I love "A bright sandal of springtime!" It could be one of several emotions or states of being you are addressing in the poem. In any case, you have succeeded - this is a beautiful piece. Thank you for sharing. P.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Eloha

11 Years Ago

Thank you Pete, it's a quickie, but sometimes that's all we have time for.
A beautiful write, my friend. I think it was a very intelligent decision to use the repetition of the words "Take me", it gave this one a different feel. I imagine you are speaking of the coming together of lovers, but metaphorically, this could mean something larger. I quite enjoyed the word play of this one, and the beauty in the small sacrifices. Nicely done.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Eloha

11 Years Ago

Today I'm in class and I got a book of Amy Lowell, I'm convinced you write somewhat like her in that.. read more
Eloha

11 Years Ago

Yes always a metaphor for something I seek that can never find...
Girl Friday (Sarah W.)

11 Years Ago

Haven't read her...I'll have to pick something up by her and see how accurate you are :)

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