Clairvoyant

Written for the Magritte contest

small space
curled tightly
walls will crumble
wings will unfurl
what once was dormant

waiting

will               fly                  away

    air                           light                    wings

merrily                      singing

melodic                notes              perched             on              vision

Reviews

[aponijose]

The gravity of your piece really is surprising. It is more so considering the simplicity of the words you use. I really do think that you are talented. You are a magician with the ability to turn paper airplanes into carrier ships ready to rescue soldiers from the war. Imagine what you can do when your poetic voice meets metal.

You can probably end poverty as we know it.

[Emily B]

it occurs to me i haven't been using my voice in exactly the right way . . . so much work to be done

[Vria P Crow]

WoW This reminds me of me in like highschool when I got star reported for writing a poem called Split:P

Ouuuu I feel like I am in a candy store.

Okay, anyways enough with my OCD. Here we go dissecting your poem of awesomeness.

THEMES

1. Claustrophobia
2. Triangles
3. Ominous

Reminds me of the Novel, "House of Leaves," by Mark Danielewski.

Very Beautiful, Emily Burns


Word Dissection

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAutho..]

What's old is new again... Ms. Emily displays one of her lovely spring blooms! Soooo pretty; love that tinkle and color. Such a happy little thing, spinning and twirling in the fresh breeze and sunshine. A winner IMHO. ^_^

[Emily B]

did i feature this little golden oldie? . . . I came by ehre looking for a review earlier, something about when our words meet metal we can change the world, I need to sharpen my skills, the world needs some changing

[Steven Cash]

niiiiiice

[Rorenzu]

thats what i love most about poems... we can make it crazy as we are without limitations from our own imaginations just to stick with our notions to conquer our emotions, now i'm in motion that i actually function as i write this with passion. LOL:)

[Corset]

I love how this spreads out like a flock of geese taking wing in ^ format, awesome!

[Sunil Sharma]

Clairvoyant is a liberating piece of poetic imagination and form that leaves us feeling elevated and renovated.

[Southern Cross]

Loved the arrangement ..like floating from it's cocoon. Emerging.. So tight then light and airy.. so simplistically beautiful...reminds me of a feather pillow bursting

[zig]

quite alot going on here, the first 6 lines are the "tight space", confined, imprisioned. in the context of flight and wings, this part of the poem is "egg" and the rest is birth and life, voice and freedom.

but also, from top to bottom, this pyramid is impossible architecture, the tight and confined "cap" is balanced on thin air, like concrete blocks lifted and suspended by airy song. you defy gravity emily, you really do. i really enjoyed reading this

[Kenneth The Poet]

Nice, like a rocket blasting off.

[Kaylor Mason]

The beautiful vision of a bird breaking free of its egg and grwoing wide to soar in the Heavens :) I like how the text spreads out as it moves down; sort of gives the impression of wings unfurling as the wind lifts them up and the bird rides the currents