Pain

A glimpse in my world...

I can't stand the smell.

I can't stand the taste.

I can't stand seeing the scars,

Spread out on my pale skin.

What causes me to act like this?

Is it the depression?

Is it the hatred?

Is it the dark that threatens to overrun me?

Or is it you, your mean voice?

Is it the intrigue?

I can stare at the scars for ages,

Marvelling at the thin red lines.

Is it this that propels me to mark my skin?

Or is it something more?

The shouting is loud in my skull,

My tears have left streaks down my face.

My hair clings to the wetness,

As I lay, curled in a ball.

Your words are my undoing,

The careless look on your face,

You don't care what you're doing,

You don't care about me.

The pain is an experiment.

One that rips me apart.

The pain is your happiness,

And my glint in the dark...

Author's Note

Just experimenting, tell me what you think! :)

Reviews

[Criss ;)]

This poem is about true pain...or may be about true love...emotion's're not here, but the feelin's towards' someone're much here...lovely write...it couldn't b a sad one, because every every words has got it's end alike same a word "love", has contained 4 letters n each one has it's own impact like
l = lovely
0 = oral communications
v = virtual n vital
e = end
that's what i got from your this poetry....so, i wish, you're gonna have my these 4 letters meanin's...lol

your this writin' made an impact on that reader who wanted to read such kinda a piece because "love's all about lie"....but this poem could be for those one's too who believe "love's all about truthness's of life"....so, i'still confused which way i've to go, which way is my right way...because i've already learnt a lesson that "without hurt, without breakin' heart, there's no meanin' of true love"...that;s what i think about pain....

you this writin' is really very good to read n to feel what's exactly a pain, but you've here missed some depth of the pain (sorry, no offence)....but....wait....!!
if we talk about only pain except depth of pain, then your this writin' is totally outstandin', because every reader wants to read such kinda a composition....you memorised me somethin' by your poem....

nicely written, you've dropped here your heart not a poem :)
well penned...
plz...have this...92.9/100 ;)

take care...!!

[4$H]

Experiment was SUCCESSFUL... Congratulations... ^this piece is wonderful :)

[B-poet]

This is a well composed poem backed by a raw emotional dose of reality as it sheds light on the inner pain caused by the vindicitive actions of the people that are the closet to you. Could be a family member, boyfriend, best friend etc. Great job. I really enjoyed this poem. :)

[anxia]

,The pain is an experiment.
One that rips me apart.
The pain is your happiness,
And my glint in the dark...,
What can i say??The pain is very well palpable. Great write

[Last King Caradin]

A very well written piece. Once again, you don't disappoint.

[Emrick]

Pain,pain and pain.I know its medicine. 'Ignorance". Just ignore everything and accept that stuff happens sometimes.

(Its a very sad poem but interesting and nice.

[Amanda]

I really like this. I can relate, nice job

[Lina Grey]

A real glimpse in your world, or a glimpse into a world you're experimenting with? Because this could almost be a glimpse into my world, except I play the roles of both people involved here, for some unfathomable reason. If this is true for you, you have a brilliant ability to express yourself. If this isn't, your ability to understand other perspectives and mindsets is incredible. This is a very powerful write. Thank you.

[Sugar and Spice]

Its a glimpse in my world, the writing is what I'm experimenting with :) I think that everyone will play both roles at some point, and that's ok as long as you can get out of them :) thank you for the review :)

[Steven Cash]

Happiness... feels a lot like sorrow

that last line made me think of that