Don't laugh

Don't laugh

A Poem by Emma

I know it's not right
to laugh when it's supposedly a fight.
I just can't help it.
It's not only because you talk s**t.
Although that is a contributing factor.
It's mainly because I lack the
ability to admit defeat.
I block the path
so victory and you can't meet.
I'm childish, you'll say.
That's the price I pay
to avoid your endless gloating display.
Normally you'd laugh as well,
and the quarrel would quell.  
But not this time.
You left. Slammed the door.
I heard your feet colliding with the oak floor.
I was going to shout 'I'm sorry'
But I didn't. But I am. Sorry. 

© 2018 Emma


Author's Note

Emma
I don't normally do rhyming and I tried to mix it up in some places in this, so let me know what you think. Totally fine if you didn't think it worked.

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It actually worked more than you think. Probably not perfectly, but the erratic rhymes gives it a sort of edge. It's really the musicality that's more important here, and the musicality of this flows very well. The narrative is humorous to the extent that it should be, and by the end, we feel a sort of pity for the poetic "I". This is well done! Very well done, indeed!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I think your words are beautiful , you don't need to rhyme to express yourself and place wonderful poems like this one. You described your human need to laugh even during a fight , that's happen all the time

Posted 6 Years Ago


Emma

6 Years Ago

Thank-you. I don't often rhyme because it feels forced and since doing studying it for A-level I hav.. read more
Planet x

6 Years Ago

I never does , you are right it can feel more forced , free verse is better

I didn't .. read more
It actually worked more than you think. Probably not perfectly, but the erratic rhymes gives it a sort of edge. It's really the musicality that's more important here, and the musicality of this flows very well. The narrative is humorous to the extent that it should be, and by the end, we feel a sort of pity for the poetic "I". This is well done! Very well done, indeed!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Emma
Emma

Herefordshire, United Kingdom



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I am currently at college, and hoping to go into a career in the performing arts industry. I love writing scripts and am enjoying exploring poetry on here and expressing my opinions through my own. .. more..

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