Untouched

Untouched

A Poem by ℰmerald ⚓

Don't lose faith in me.
You were so sweet...
I'm sorry this is the way it has to be.
In my head your song's stuck on repeat.

I couldn't get attached.
My heart can't take no more lies,
Too many times it's been patched.
And my eyes are all out of cries.

I can't live forever.
Can I just take some time?
Lately I've been in the worst place ever...
But in time maybe you'll be mine..?

But how in the hell,
Did we end up like this?
Something I couldn't tell.
I just need that one first kiss.

I fell for you,
My butterfly.
I'll show you I'm true.
Please don't say goodbye...

© 2013 ℰmerald ⚓



Author's Note

ℰmerald ⚓
I'm sorry..

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Beautiful. Your sorrow is communicated in such an artful way that it's almost impossible not to feel that it has become your own. Well penned and thank you for sharing.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ℰmerald ⚓

4 Years Ago

Thank you.
Really good. I loved it

Posted 4 Years Ago


ℰmerald ⚓

4 Years Ago

Thank you.
This is beautiful ! Desperate not to lose the one who you care deeply about .

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ℰmerald ⚓

4 Years Ago

I care about her a lot, I don't know what I'd do if I lost her..
Moon

4 Years Ago

It sounds like you truely love her . She is lucky to have you .
*Lose, not loose.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ℰmerald ⚓

4 Years Ago

thanks..
A Girl

4 Years Ago

I didn't mean that in a rude way. I make that mistake often myself, I was just givin' you a heads up.. read more
ℰmerald ⚓

4 Years Ago

ohkay thank you. :)
I like it a lot. It flows well and it's very emotional. The only thing is that some of the rhyming seems really natural and then some of it seems pretty forced... Kind of inconsistent, but you still did very well :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ℰmerald ⚓

4 Years Ago

Thank you, sir.
awes who is this for, it really sweet

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Janice Fronek(red.panda)

4 Years Ago

awes it okay hun don't feel bad
fantastic poem. i enjoyed it very much. the use of rhyme is used well and symbolism is well put. goodjob

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ℰmerald ⚓

4 Years Ago

thanks :)

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Added on December 18, 2012
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ℰmerald ⚓
ℰmerald ⚓

Motionless in Dreamstate., CA



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I don't post as much as I used to, I'll trash most of the songs I write because I always compare them to my favorite bands' music and it just never seems good enough. I don't think my poems and stori.. more..

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