Wonderful Winter

It's the time for Cold Floors,

Break out the Fuzzy Socks.

Bring in some Chopped wood,

from Outside.

Sit by the fire, nice and toasty now.

BUT wait!

It can get even better.

A nice warm mug of apple cider, or hot chocolate.

No matter how much others complains about this weather,

it fits me perfectly.

BItter air outside.  Making breathing hurt a little.

Such a wonderful sting, And the Numbness too!

Dark, cloudy, gloomy days are the best, and is when I’m happiest.

Its like nature is showing the world,

what’s inside my head.

During fall and winter, no

New marks

appear.

Why would I need to make more?

I’m already experiencing the comforting sting of the cold,

And the easing pain from breathing

this wonderfully bitter air.

Reviews

[Alao Taiwo]

i love this. i so so...is it satirism or sarcasm or oxymoron. the style, yet brings home the melancholic point; "dark, cloudy days are the best and it's when i'm happiest". yet you managed to create a positive

Again you said "comfort sting of the cold", "wonderfully bitter". lovely expressions.

[Wonderland Asylum]

Thank-you so much!

[Nolo Segundo]

I like this Emo-- a nice evocation with a hint of 'more'....

[Rye]

such a beautiful, descriptive write. Enjoyed this one
a lot. amazing, fun write. you have talent. keep writing always

[gorillarock]

This is an inspiring piece. I'll take the muse and write tonight :) You've opened up a layer of darkness I rarely feel inclined to expose, but your take on winter is well delivered! I invite you to read my poem "Warm Winters Welcome", as inspired by you :D

[AliceBarnes]

Can I just mention how much I loved the twist at the end? I was not expecting that at all. This poem so perfectly describes the weather of winter, the dark, gloomy days, as well as, the sting of the cold air entering your nose and mouth when you take a breath outside (such a small thing that I often forget until it is winter again). At first, this poem seemed like it was just talking about the weather and all the things that Winter brings, but then with the twist at the end it really brought it into perspective that winter is not just a time for festivities. I really enjoyed reading this and look forward to reading more of your works! One thing I would just say is that the twist at the end could potentially (for lack of a better word) trigger someone, especially if they have have experienced this, therefore, I would suggest putting a warning in the title so that people are just made aware of that.

[Beth Lindsay]

You created a beautiful contrast between the warmth of the indoors during the winter and the blistering cold of outside.
I like how you put "From outside" on its own line, reminding the readers that it is cold out and it sucks being the one to have to go out there when your already comfortably warm.

[KCthelastboyscout]

Beautiful with a little twist at the end.pleasure to read all the way through

[N]

I want hot chocolate after reading this!:D

[RBrmdz]

Its a bit ironic to me. It starts off like an upbeat xmas like cheer but i sense a bit of sarcasm maybe? The no new marks part makes me think of self harm marks. The bitter numbness of winter matches what you feel inside is what i got. The emotion i got from this poem was similar to dark humor finding the positives in the bad. I could be so off but i loved the poem and i took alot from it probably because of my own experiences. Relatable so relatable.

[Wonderland Asylum]

what you got from this piece is exactly what you were supposed to get.
yes, I love the winter. but I'm also making a point to show how I feel.
It is supposed to be ironic, and sarcastic, as well as start upbeat, but take a dark turn.
THank-you for reviewing my poem.

[Final-Karma]

This strikes me as a very two way poem. You enjoy the comforting feeling that the cold gives you but at the same time its that very numbness that leaves you hollow in the end. Very good poem. I enjoyed it.