Fading with dawns light

The feelings of losing a loved one

 

 

I lay in his arms, dreading our last kiss
There will be no more nights beyond this
Our time together has run its course
His heart fails and leaves me in remorse

All these years, yet they're still not enough
I shall try to be brave, I’ll try to be tough
But the pain is too intense for me to bear
Knowing it's the last time I’ll hold him near

Fingers entwined, our hearts beating in tune
How can the end of us have come so soon?
We watch darkness fade with each painful sigh
Why do we have to say our last goodbye?

The rain outside falls slow, mimicking my tears
We whisper of our deep love thru the years
Holding on so tight, but life flees with each breath
There’s no consolation, no relief when there is death

Soon moonlight shall fade with dawns light
I can no longer hide my pain in shadows of night
As day comes to life, darkness is dying
That’s when the sun will catch me crying
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Reviews

[Fran Marie]

Soon moonlight shall fade with dawns light
I can no longer hide my pain in shadows of night
As day begins to come to life, darkness is dying
That's when the sun will catch me crying"~

I love this!This is just Beautiful beyond words,even tho~ content is sad ~

the poetic expression you use to deliver such deep loving thoughts and endearments

is extremely well crafted~Outstanding!! Poetry to be sure!!~

Fran Marie

[Jibey]

Sad and moving... the darkness of the night and the falling rain create the atmosphere of closure...

[Dylan Cook]

Very powerful. Good work

[angelina neves]

very beautiful expression of pain... we can feel the heart

[deeps]

This is sad really, i can feel the out pour of emotion.
Beautifully written. very well expressed.
I can feel the heartache as well as breaking.

[Sharon Miller Bolander]

Fingers entwined, our hearts beating in tune
How can the end of us have come so soon?
We watch darkness fade with each painful sigh
Why do we have to be saying our last goodbye?

Your entire poem captures the sorrow of a final goodbye, but this particular stanza made me "see" the act itself. I know this is something most of us push in the backs of our minds even though we know that some day it will come to us all.

Well-written and deeply appreciated poem!

Sharon

[Titus McGuire]

I'm reminded of a line from a Leslie Tucker song titled In This Room...'True love never dies, but sometimes lovers do.' This poem seems to encompass that idea, that though the human life is short, love can conquer the barriers of time and the grave. Even in the final moments of life, your love is still strong - 'We whisper of our time and deep love thru the years' and 'Why do we have to be saying our last goodbye?' The love is still there, as strong as ever, and shall be ever present beyond the days of our lives on this earth. Death is much a part of life, and there is no consolation, but true love never dies. Beautifully written. Bravi.

[Masquerade]

Empress, this poem left me temporarily speechless! I am in awe of the extreme beauty of your words. I was so moved (almost to tears) by the vividly described emotions of the character. Losing someone to death is always a hard thing to deal with, but when you lose the love of your life; it is totally unbearable.

"The rain outside falls steady, mimicking my tears
We whisper of our time and deep love thru the years
Holding on so tight, but life flees with each breath
There's no consolation, no relief when there is death"

You were able to capture this fact in this wonderful yet sad tale. I've read a lot of your work since we've know each other but this is by far the absolute best in my opinion. The imagery, form and flow is impeccable. This is poetry at it's best! I loved it!!

[Brjden (Bridge-Den) Cre..]

Very sad, and I can really feel the emotions coming from it.
I agree with some of the others here, loving the last stanza and how well that came off. Very emotional write...

[Spoken]

LOVE the ending for lines, very powerful and great imagery. The emotion is well expressed and definately felt. *clap clap* brava!

[The High Poet]

I just loved this poem :) "I can no longer hide my pain in shadows of night" I just loved this line. I look forward to reading more of your work.

Thanks for sharing