What if I told you

What if I told you

A Poem by Woody
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To my son

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What if I said you were mortal

And there was an end to your ride?

And that you’d walk through that portal

And be stuck on the other side?

 

What if when departing this earth

You’ll leave behind your possessions?

Does it bring you sadness or mirth

To have no answers, just questions?

 

So live your life now and be bold

Do good unto others, my son

Today Leave your mark on the world

A sure way your name will live on 

 

 


© 2016 Woody



Author's Note

Woody
I'm sure as hell don't know where this came from. I'm as surprised as you are, guys.
if you could improve on the poetic side of this.. thing, I'd be much obliged.

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You have asked the question that many of us have searched for. This is why there are so many religions. They all have different solutions - some banal, some kindly and some vicious. I asked the same questions in my poem "Wholly Unholy".
You don;t need to improve on your poetic presentation, Woody. It is brief ,concise and realistically worded..

Norman

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Woody

1 Year Ago

Norman, it must be lack of confidence but I can never admit to myself thatt my poems are passable. h.. read more



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Nice, simply put; summing up how we should be doing in this life.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Woody

7 Months Ago

hey MichaeL thanks a lot for the visit. in truth this is a rare moment of lucidity. I had a hard tim.. read more
You have asked the question that many of us have searched for. This is why there are so many religions. They all have different solutions - some banal, some kindly and some vicious. I asked the same questions in my poem "Wholly Unholy".
You don;t need to improve on your poetic presentation, Woody. It is brief ,concise and realistically worded..

Norman

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Woody

1 Year Ago

Norman, it must be lack of confidence but I can never admit to myself thatt my poems are passable. h.. read more
The madman writes poetry too! In all seriousness, a righteous read. Good thoughts for your son to live by. Be bold, best advice ever.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Woody

1 Year Ago

I keep telling reviewers not to judge me by these sporadic moments of "lucidity". that's not me real.. read more
Paloma

1 Year Ago

I doubt they're sporadic funny guy, but I'm happy to see your evil twin comes out to play most days... read more
Good advice to your son. A touching write.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Woody

1 Year Ago

thank you so much Robert. a rare moment of lucidity, I assure you :)
glad you liked it.
There is a Milliganesque quality to your writing Woody. That sense of satirical truisms that I always feel when reading Spike is present in your work also.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Woody

1 Year Ago

I'm flattered iand63. thank you so much. I'm not all that much into poetry, really but I remember re.. read more
Wow! A very vell contructed alternate rhyme that made the content superb. The last stanza struck. Well written.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Woody

1 Year Ago

thanks a bunch Onyia. I do not consider myself a poet so I'm flattered you enjoyed this one.
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Onyia-ota, Kingsley Chukwuebuka

1 Year Ago

You're welcome.
I was expecting something funny but this caught me unaware. It's a very powerful poem and just shows how wonderful you are with words.
We will move on to unknown territory and will have lots of questions and no answers.


Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Woody

1 Year Ago

your kind words are much appreciated, Haider. that was one of my rare moments of maturedness :)
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"What if I said you were mortal" ... what...me? Mortal? Nah, I'm too cool for that lol jk. That was an awesome read, I like the point of view from which is told. Makes me feel like you are talking directly to me...a sense of up-close and personal.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Woody

1 Year Ago

nah I see from your pic that you're enjoying life and having a good time so I don't want to spoil th.. read more
EMMIE

1 Year Ago

You are welcome and thank you. I wish I could write funny things but my stuff is depressing as hell .. read more
Woody

1 Year Ago

ah well it's good to stop laughing for a moment and ponder the meaning of life. but let me check out.. read more
I love a piece where the words are so powerful that such an aggressive rhyming scheme fades into the background to become the supporting cast.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Woody

1 Year Ago

thanks a bunch S. glad you found it interesting. one of my rare moments of lucidity :))

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