Stone Temple Pilots have a song called "Sex Type Thing", which was written from the perspective of a rapist. I've always found that a very intriguing idea. So this is my little attempt at it.
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I dig that song. I also enjoyed this poem. As I was reading it, it made me think of a broken relationship but about half way through I started to realize. Something isn't right here. And the ending made me smile at thinking of her taking her revenge. Nice work.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
I'm glad you enjoyed it Neal. Ya, the end is my favorite.
I dig that song. I also enjoyed this poem. As I was reading it, it made me think of a broken relationship but about half way through I started to realize. Something isn't right here. And the ending made me smile at thinking of her taking her revenge. Nice work.
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
I'm glad you enjoyed it Neal. Ya, the end is my favorite.
Having been a rape victim multiple times in my childhood, I've often wished to convey the distortion in a person's mind that allows them to do this. I think you're taking a good stab at it. Being in third person ("he") makes this feel less intense & less immediate. I find that first person ("I") is far more powerful in showing the way a very warped person sees the world. Not to say that this needs to be changed . . . just saying that someday it might be interesting to try portraying a similarly disgusting character via first person. The comment about "love" kinda jolted me, since rape has nothing to do with love, but then you went on to explain further, which helped put this into perspective. I feel you show the hatred & rage behind rape, but I also feel this could be pumped up quite a bit more by showing us how he looks, smells, feels, sounds, & tastes . . . show us that filthy ugly rage up close & personal.
Thank-you so much for your review. I very much appreciate your outlook on this horrible subject. Hav.. read moreThank-you so much for your review. I very much appreciate your outlook on this horrible subject. Having had no first-hand experience myself I'm not surprised I bungled it in places. Also, this is the reason for less details in how he looks, smells, feels, etc...
7 Years Ago
Hey, I lived thru this for over 10 years as a kid & I'm 60 years old now . . . still haven't gotten .. read moreHey, I lived thru this for over 10 years as a kid & I'm 60 years old now . . . still haven't gotten up the courage to show the gritty details of how ugly a person like this can be. One of these days I'll dig out those wretched details. I think you did a great job for someone who is trying to imagine how it must be (((HUGS)))
7 Years Ago
Thanks...you got me teary. People deserve so much better.
So much emotions written on this poetry. Domestic violence must cease to happen. The last stanza is just frightening, guys women maybe frail but they are really scary! Your poetry growls! Enigma Monster! Lovin' it!
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
Thank-you. I can't tell you how much I love the idea of a tiny little woman rising up to destroy her.. read moreThank-you. I can't tell you how much I love the idea of a tiny little woman rising up to destroy her tormentor, with juicy surprise all over his face. I'm glad it frightened you, my mind was growling when I wrote it.
7 Years Ago
it is! I think that feeling you should put that to writing a sequel a fight back. It is loud! you're.. read moreit is! I think that feeling you should put that to writing a sequel a fight back. It is loud! you're welcome Enigma Monster! :)
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