I really liked this, once the rhyme pattern was set. I am by no means suggesting you need to change a single word of this, but I wonder if it would flow more fluently if you tried...
"There wasn't much that I believed in,
Your hiding things wasn't much sin,
Because even God keeps secrets.
Dear soul, wild emotions pets."
It is more consistent with the rest of your poem, but I like it as is, as well ;-) Thanks for sharing it with us.
I really liked this, once the rhyme pattern was set. I am by no means suggesting you need to change a single word of this, but I wonder if it would flow more fluently if you tried...
"There wasn't much that I believed in,
Your hiding things wasn't much sin,
Because even God keeps secrets.
Dear soul, wild emotions pets."
It is more consistent with the rest of your poem, but I like it as is, as well ;-) Thanks for sharing it with us.
self effacing, i know this train of thought. you have delivered it with wickedly sharp precision and clever words. there is a great talent living within you, dear poet. nicely done!
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