"Everlasting proof"

I wanted the structure of this poem to match the words.

The sentences I can not speak to you

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in poetry,

each wowill hug parchmentrd

how I long to hold you.

 

The metaphors will hold a secret

to be decoded by the heart;

each comma a pause,

expressing how I hold my breath,,,,,,,

waiting to be with you.

 

Line breaks will represent

 

 

 

 

the void within my heart

and the suspense of what's to come;

each period an assertion

as absolute as my feelings towards you.

 

If the meter seems fast it's only because my pulse races from memories of you,

if the meaning becomes obscure

I apologize, it's complicated.

 

Each key I touch is just a substitute

in place of what I can not;

each feeling is MOwithLDtheEDink,

every statement an utter truth,

down to the last word.

 

Proof of an emotion everlasting.

Author's Note

I was wanting to try something new with the structure of the poem. Let me know how it works.

Reviews

[Legacy]

EricGodsil,

This is an ingeniously thought and well-structured poem... nay poem is not nearly the word I need.

Tapestry... this is a wonderfully woven piece of tapestry for the world to behold. I am stunned by the artistic talent you have with each line. It takes far more than mere words to conquer this task, and you my friend have done it.

As a writer, I tend to search for words to describe the feeling I felt when reading another’s words, here I am searching for words to describe the art I just saw.

This is a very original piece with excellent potential for becoming groundbreaking. I ponder on how many people have actually attempted this currently. I know I will - at least on scratch paper.

Thank you for displaying your art,

Legacy

You should place this one in the Love contest for Poetic Infusion Society.

[Tate Morgan]

A visual experiance as wll as a piece of art this is what I call art To make something meaningful from ones thoughts and the reader in this case me is taken on the same hjourney Verynice
Tate

[Vinod Kumar U K]

Nice voyage...

[Sapphire Dreams]

It works really well in my opinion, made me think. very clever:)

[DeletedUser]

I love your usage of different fonts and colors. It certainly makes your point. Your writing is absolutely fantastic, and I find myself riveted.

[Black]

a great read,
i dont like the structure,
but i like the feeling about the poem,
i dont think it needs all that fuss,
but that is just me

Stunning! Great job, while reading this, it makes me think, and I guess this is the most beautiful way a poet can bring people somewhere else, then their own thoughts. Lovely! I'm a fan!

[beautifulxevil]

That was a great poem! I loved the line structure thing, it worked very well. You could practically feel the words. Awesome work. :)

[Tasha]

I liked the structure, it was different but it worked really well. For the piece itself it was really good. Great job.
♥ Ta'Shandra

[brenda]

wow love the structure of the poem nice !:)

[Margarette]

What a very fascinating style of writing a poem and I prefer to call it series of verses. I like how you express the emotions using creativity. The truth is, I have a hard time reading it at first. I reread it again and again. Now I understand it and it turned out great.