Morning Calm

Haiku

steel on still water
with time's passing all we build
fades like memory

Author's Note

Haiku for Devon's Picture This contest.

Reviews

[Devons]

There's a lot of weight and presence within such few words. I'm not a fan of Haikus, but this example says more than the average and has stronger meaning. I believe that if you choose a limiting structure then you might as well make sure you have something to say. And this does.

[EJ Servellon]

Lots of impact for a few short words. Tears a hole in your mind, that invites the reader to look deeper. Nice!

[Seashell]

this speaks to me... whereas a lot of Haiku words don't...(to me anyway) :-/

Thanks for share....clever
Babs x

[Call Me Blu]

The first haiku to EVER make sense! YAY! I hate when they are like
Leaves are fluttering
Wind rustling them from branches
Pinapples speak Greek
Lol but I really like the shortness of this and the way it flowas and makes a complete poem not just words. It doesn't seem forced.

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

Much said in few words.I think you have expressed a lot in those three lines..so apt..