Careful Spectre

Careful Spectre

A Poem by Eudaimoniac
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My passing attempt at a pantoum

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We really didn’t want him there
a lone man walking in the shadows
a face so cruel, so solitude
we didn’t think he’d come for us

a lone man walking in the shadows
but in his hand he carried hope
we didn’t think he’d come for us
upon this path of our salvation

but in his hand he carried hope
a Trojan horse for all to share
upon this path of our salvation
we broke his bread and ate his flesh

a Trojan horse for all to share
we really couldn’t stand him there
we broke his bread and ate his flesh
his face was bare his breath like wine.


© 2012 Eudaimoniac



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This is beautiful, & so true, also. It's a wonderful description of our sin, Jesus' life on Earth, & what lead up to the crucifixion. I love it. :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


I'm not sure if the man walking in shadows is the one from Nazareth or someone/something else, but mystery surrounds him and his gift. Just like real life, I'd say.

Posted 5 Years Ago


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5 Years Ago

I think the indirect allusion to the Christ figure here was a way for me to contrast an idea that is.. read more

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Eudaimoniac
Eudaimoniac

Sydney, NSW, Australia



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Like lightning in the womb. New to fiction, long time time admirer of language. I'd say I'm probably more content-driven rather than form, but I hope to learn about, and improve in, both aspects. I.. more..

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