Death by Life

A little story of dying because of life

Rain in my dreams,
Making me a fiend,
Darkness and destruction,
Causing an eruption,
Death by life,
Living with strife,
Cant hold on,
Wont be strong,
Days keeping me down,
I feel like a clown,
Torment and rage,
Keeping my gaze, 
Destruction in my path,
Look at the aftermath,
Death come to me,
Set me free,
From this life,
Of pain and strife,
This is my life,
I will oblige,
my destiny denied,
I feel no pain,
I have nothing to gain,
This ends with rain!

Reviews

[halflives]

Wowh. That was incredible. I love the description and the way you desplayed it. I love this.

[cassandra violet]

interesting how you both started and ended with rain. I see a lot of potential in this poem. In all honesty I think you should try re-writting it without being bound to rhyme just to see where it goes :)

[Machiavelli]

Eh, not the best i can do