Translucent

A ghostly tear
slipped
down her translucent cheek
as she stared at the floating boy
in front of her

"Why?"
She asked
Shaking her head.

He just smiled
and drew her into a hug
Which both could feel but not
And he whispered in her ear

"You didn't get
What I meant
when I said
I would follow you anywhere."

Reviews

[TWISTED NIGHTMARE]

so simple but so sweet...i loved it

[Lucy]

This is very beautiful.

[Omar Fendri]

wow !!! heartwarming ! what a creative simple piece... It just makes me illustrate a whole story in my mind... beautifully written.

[Aleyah]

This sounds like a book I've read. Obviously, it's not overflowing with sharp vocabulary, but I like it because it's so quaint & simple. I like this.
PS - I'm not reviewing this because of your picture, I'm reviewing it because it's good.

[Allie :)]

Wow! This really got me thinking...(which is a compliment, because I don't like to think)
There is some mystery behind this, and left me wanting more...but I think that that's the beauty of it.....is there anyway you could write up a sequel?

[Eli]

Wow, this had me staring at it for a moment before I could really think anything. It's so simple, yet much more. It's short, but the words can keep going forever. The perfect poem!

[Katannaism]

This is beautiful! Simply exquisite! Short, simple, melancholic and chock full of emotion. Very raw, powerful yet gentle and just delicate. Lovely job! ;)

[raindroplove]

wow so sweet am im almost in tears:)

[Miss Sally Sunshine]

This is such a sweet and sad poem. It's absolutle lovely! It flows perfectly and the meaning of the poem is beautifully shown. Fantabulous job!

I love the picture as well, it's really cute!!

[Miu]

Very Lovely Poem. Its a ton better than any of the poems i've ever writen.