Broken Love

Sitting here, abandoned

Wondering where it went wrong

Maybe I should have seen it coming

Maybe I knew it all along

 

I shouldn’t have let you get me

I should’ve looked out for the signs

My mind knew it was too good

But my heart fell for all your lies

 

And now my heart’s in pieces

My eyes are filled with tears

I only got a few months

Of those promised years

 

But I know that it’s on me

For following my heart

And I know one day my heart might heal

But you’ll always be the missing part

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

tragic broken heart :( the read was smoother the second and third time .. it has a disjointed feel to it after V! .. i think its the change in meter from trochaic to iambic, as well as the changes in number of feet... that does it .. not necessarily a criticism ... famous poets do it on purpose all the time ...kind of goes along with a broken heart eh!?
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I love your "About Me" by the way ;)

[Evelynn]

Thank you so much!!

[AllauraRose]

I love this so much!!! Heartbreak is one the thing that doesn't heal as quickly or smoothly as we want it to (if that makes any sense). I could feel your emotions and I can't say I have been heartbroken, but I have gotten my hopes up. Amazing work!

[Evelynn]

Thank you so much!

[Donna]

I really like this! I have been there before! I thought the ending was great!!

[Evelynn]

Thank you!

[B. A. May]

It has a powerful message, although the ending does not entirely match the pace you set throughout the poem . It's great, your end game can be a little better, but not much.

[Evelynn]

Thanks for the advice.

[emipoemi]

This is another example of a poem with an absolutely amazing start and end, some outstanding lines in between, but falls flat in musicality. It's just not as fluid as it may seem, or at least I can't fathom how to read the lines that come across as a tad choppy. This is honestly sooooo brilliant, but it's clogged by the choppy musicality (also, "seen"....not "saw" in the first stanza). Well done, overall!

[Call me hopeless]

This is amazing I love it

[Hbrook]

This is beautiful! I really love this! I can relate to it sadly ; _ ; but it's the tuff s**t that makes us stronger :) goodluck and see you around

[Kate Z.]

How often we ignore the signs because our own need is so great. Your poem expresses the hurt, and the fear of falling again, allowing another betrayal. Of living with a fractured heart. Keep writing.

[Avia]

A few grammar corrections
Maybe i should have seen it coming
The 7th line, the In is missing at the beginning.
But overall a beautiful work. Well done