Summer Love

Summer Love

A Poem by Evelynn

Beautiful in the dark

Lost in a world full of sparks

Scared to show her face

Speaks, but no one hears her voice


Hiding behind her wall of lies

Kept it up after all this time

Smiling even through the pain

After all this time she still remembers his name


Only around him did she feel

The emotion of love and it was real

But life was cold and cruel

And they were ripped apart before he even knew


Even now her love shines bright

Because for her, he was the only light

But as it would be, he would never remeber

The summer with a girl as cold as December


© 2017 Evelynn



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Strong imagery! Powerful theme! That last line is killer! The only place where it falls flat is in musicality. Certain lines, namely lines 8 and 12 need trimming for the musicality to carry over. Other than that, this is wonderful. Well done!!

(musicality, mind you, is not the same as rhythm/metre, but rather the fluidity from line to line and thought to thought).

Posted 1 Year Ago


Whoa o.o that really hit me. Very emotional. I really like that last line.

Posted 1 Year Ago


A lot of real life emotions felt in the words.
"Only around him did she feel
The emotion of love and it was real
But life was cold and cruel
And they were ripped apart before he even new"
I liked the complete poem but the above lines stood out to me. A strong and honest ending to the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


Evelynn

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much! A lot of my poems are personal so that means a lot to me!
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

A well written poem and you are welcome.
You express your emotions really well.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Evelynn

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much!
Najam Us Saher

1 Year Ago

You're welcome.

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Evelynn
Evelynn

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