First Love

First Love

A Poem by Evelynn

You were my first love
My first kiss
An angel sent from above
A memory of pure bliss
You were my first fight
And my first tears
My bright light
And my perfect years
You were my first heartbreak
My first breakdown
My best mistake
And my shinning crown
You were my first love
But not my last
You were my white dove
But you’re in the past


© 2017 Evelynn



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.......wow.......I'm having a hard time to say any more......wow.......

If I may make a small suggestion: replacing "but" in the final line with "now" adds for more power. I strongly suggest you consider that. Other than that, this is beautiful. Well done!

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I truly LOVED it. I'm a songwriter and I immediately thought of a beat when reading it. I give it a 99

Posted 1 Week Ago


this is great.. it captures the fondness for recollecting a chapter in someones life.. I wish I could be as positive about myself like that.. you sound so free of regret

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


An easy read...
Heartfelt Memories..

J.J.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


This was so sweet!!
You expressed the feeling of first love and a first heartbreak so beautifully!!!
Your poem touched my heart !!

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


.......wow.......I'm having a hard time to say any more......wow.......

If I may make a small suggestion: replacing "but" in the final line with "now" adds for more power. I strongly suggest you consider that. Other than that, this is beautiful. Well done!

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Its good that I see no grudges between the lines. Just memories we'd all remember from a first love. nice one ^^

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


Bittersweet memories. The ambiance of emotion you create envelopes the reader, as we all look back on our "first".

Posted 1 Month Ago


Wonderful memories flowing through your words.First loves are the hardest to forget;-]

Posted 1 Month Ago


Memories... relatable and thought-full.

Posted 1 Month Ago


The last four lines blew me away! Wow. Keep writing, girl! Beautiful

Posted 1 Month Ago



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Evelynn
Evelynn

Roanoke, VA



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