First Love

First Love

A Poem by Evelynn

You were my first love
My first kiss
An angel sent from above
A memory of pure bliss
You were my first fight
And my first tears
My bright light
And my perfect years
You were my first heartbreak
My first breakdown
My best mistake
And my shinning crown
You were my first love
But not my last
You were my white dove
But you’re in the past


© 2017 Evelynn



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.......wow.......I'm having a hard time to say any more......wow.......

If I may make a small suggestion: replacing "but" in the final line with "now" adds for more power. I strongly suggest you consider that. Other than that, this is beautiful. Well done!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

emipoemi

9 Months Ago

Normally with the last line, you want to be as powerful as possible.....but now that I read it again.. read more
Evelynn

9 Months Ago

Thanks! Sorry it took me so long to reply( I mean 5 months), I was and then I had to do something an.. read more
emipoemi

9 Months Ago

my pleasure.



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Yes, we never forget our first love. Become more sweeter with time and distance. Thank you Evelynn for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 9 Months Ago


Evelynn

9 Months Ago

Thank you Coyote for reading
Coyote Poetry

9 Months Ago

You are welcome dear Evelynn.
I enjoy the simplicity of your work. First loves are usually dedications of ignorance or innocence and sometimes both. I laugh to hear people say they'd like to "fall in love". In my mind, love is hard work, responsibility and sacrifice. And I don't hear of many folks standing in line to offer those things freely. And love has to be free or it isn't love at all...it's just a trade. I told my brother I was going to have tee shirts printed with that slogan: Love is: Hard Work, Responsibility and Sacrifice. He advised me that I'd not be able to sell many and almost none to the "under fifty" crowd. I guess it's a thing we all must learn in time.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Evelynn

1 Year Ago

Thanks. And you're right love is hard work. No matter how many times you've been in love, it doesn't.. read more
Fabian G. Franklin

1 Year Ago

I can honestly say I've loved many people through the years but never stopped loving any of them...e.. read more
Evelynn

1 Year Ago

I don't think that after loving someone, you can just stop loving them, no matter how long it was. W.. read more
I truly LOVED it. I'm a songwriter and I immediately thought of a beat when reading it. I give it a 99

Posted 1 Year Ago


this is great.. it captures the fondness for recollecting a chapter in someones life.. I wish I could be as positive about myself like that.. you sound so free of regret

Posted 1 Year Ago


An easy read...
Heartfelt Memories..

J.J.

Posted 1 Year Ago


This was so sweet!!
You expressed the feeling of first love and a first heartbreak so beautifully!!!
Your poem touched my heart !!

Posted 1 Year Ago


.......wow.......I'm having a hard time to say any more......wow.......

If I may make a small suggestion: replacing "but" in the final line with "now" adds for more power. I strongly suggest you consider that. Other than that, this is beautiful. Well done!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

emipoemi

9 Months Ago

Normally with the last line, you want to be as powerful as possible.....but now that I read it again.. read more
Evelynn

9 Months Ago

Thanks! Sorry it took me so long to reply( I mean 5 months), I was and then I had to do something an.. read more
emipoemi

9 Months Ago

my pleasure.
Its good that I see no grudges between the lines. Just memories we'd all remember from a first love. nice one ^^

Posted 1 Year Ago


Bittersweet memories. The ambiance of emotion you create envelopes the reader, as we all look back on our "first".

Posted 1 Year Ago


Wonderful memories flowing through your words.First loves are the hardest to forget;-]

Posted 1 Year Ago



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