la lune

la lune

A Poem by EylonBear
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we went to the store and the moon was so bright it was like the sun. this just started playing in my mine

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when the moonlight shines 
like a lamp in the sky
a woman walks pale 
meandering about grass and trees
aimlessly about roads and side walks
when she passes--
sadness follows
like an echo of things lost

pale she walks about
a wraith in the gloom
allure the midnight fall
and come avoid her stare
for anguish comes with it

© 2011 EylonBear


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EylonBear
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I like the imagery, "when she passes -- saddess follows" I just imagine pale ghostly figure walking around in a permanent shadow and flowers/grass/plants temporarily wilting when she come nears, and animals bowing their heads in they happen to fall on her path. It makes me a bit sad, but anyway good job ^^

Posted 12 Years Ago


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I like the imagery, "when she passes -- saddess follows" I just imagine pale ghostly figure walking around in a permanent shadow and flowers/grass/plants temporarily wilting when she come nears, and animals bowing their heads in they happen to fall on her path. It makes me a bit sad, but anyway good job ^^

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

All I can think of is a scary ghost. Haha. But it was great how you described the night. It made me feel like I was the one in there, that's why it gave me goosebumps. Readers can have different interpretations on this poem. Great write. ;)

Posted 12 Years Ago


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EylonBear
EylonBear

Manchester, NH



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My name is Deena. I started writing in junior high with a novel. I never finished it. since then I've written a number of poems. a coupld short stories and I have one completed novel in the revision p.. more..

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