Do You Really Have Something To Say?

My question to all

Do you really have something to say?

Not metaphors or similes,

Personification or imagery, 

I mean words that speak to me.

That whisper in my ears like a little kid telling a secret.

A secret that is truth behind the illusion of this world's deception.

Do you really have something to say?

Not lines or verses that you want to rhyme

Or lines that you feel define,

the perception of something beyond, 

the reality of the times.

Or are you still blind?

Do you really have something to say?

Because as I click and read 

and read and click, 

I'm looking for something that sticks to my bones

Like a steak and potato... meat for my soul,

Because Lord knows, these words, these phrases I'm reading are starting to getting old.

Do you really have something to say?

Or would you rather remain cliche'.

Where is authentic writing, originality that breaks the rules,

Challenges all the ways you learned to speak in school. 

I'm wanting to read about real love, 

not this fake stuff

This powdery sugary everything is sweet like cake stuff,

Blow my mind with what love is,

Or are you a hopeless romantic trying to imagine it?

Let me read the real you, 

because this version of you is like the version of the other person I just read,

Words that change by authors that repeat same ole' lines,

Nothing new same message that's constantly said, 

No imprint of your own, just an everlasting repetitive song,

Of a majority of poets, writers, lost in the conformity of this decrepit world,

using the power of words. . . 

For meaningless messages. 

With lack of true authentic expression

So.....

Do you really have something to say?

 

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Well versed in the lines... the repeating stanza all by itself:

Do you really have something to say?

This speaks volumes... the way you're encouraging the writer to be more... give a bit of what life is really like in the written words... the concept of the theme reads like someone is on a podium saying this aloud... just the way the whole write conveys to the reader...

[F.Gentil]

This came to me a few minutes ago, I find that a lot of true art has all but faded, I based this on a book I read, "Democracy in America" by Alexis De Tocqueville (1832). He stated that in America there would be a lack of literature, a lack of philosophical work, and a lack of artists with real content. Thank you for the review, when I write I relive my former days of speech and debate, so I guess it seeps onto the page. Thank you :)

[Angi]

F, you have said some things that I am just not brave enough to do. I really, really appreciate that you did. The, 'powdery sugary everything is sweet like cake stuff' line had me nodding. I just finished up a contest that asked for love poems without using the word love. I wanted fresh and new. In fact, I look for fresh and new poetry every single day. What a wonder when a little gem crosses my path. Thank you so much for submitting and congrats on taking Silver! Angi~

[Brittney]

This piece has awesome flow! I love the repetition of the line
Do you really have something to say? It breaks up each thought, but each stanza
Still is so perfectly intertwined. Lovely

[F.Gentil]

Thank You so much appreciate the review, I am happy you caught it, because that is exactly what I was aiming for, state what I would speak about then give an example while connecting it throughout. Thanks :)!!

[Horizon K.]

Very cool and relevant for here on the WC, and I agree wholeheartedly. I want to read poetry about what is real and not just pretty words making pretty paintings, vibrant colors over empty statements... The core, the bone, I seek that too. And well versed, this was too...

[F.Gentil]

Yes me too I want to read great poetry because when you read great poetry...it affects your whole essence and make you take a step back from your own perspective and say damn, that enlightened me. I hate wasting time on literature just for show, you said it perfectly, 'pretty words making pretty paintings, vibrant colors over empty statements" yesss that's exactly what it is! Thanks for the review! :)

[Pax]

i really do like this, the depth it provokes to the questions it gives...
I have been writing not that long, because before expressing myself in words never come up to me as comforting as it is now...

as an artist i have this urge to create, i sketch and paint it many times as possible until my heart is somehow satisfied... it's somehow an escape for me from the outside world...

as a poet, i become more understanding how life goes... understand better how human nature works, and i'm still learning... lastly i understand better who i am, through my piece i see the me that i haven't seen myself, i said this before: my poetry are fragments of my soul, scattered all over the pieces i had made...

I said this to one of my piece: My life is a cliché; at least I don’t feel alone in this world.
because perhaps: Our lives can be relateable, but it is not comparable... we are unique in many different ways...

they say nothing is new in the literature world but you can always be unique in your own way of thinking..
100/100

[F.Gentil]

I recently told someone that poetry is like a glimpse of a bigger message we all have to say and by the time it is uttered, we are never fully able to get the entirety of our thoughts out, but what we do squeeze out is enough to talk about and dissect for ages. Writing is such an interesting tool, and timeless artform. Just like your sketches, the images your brain produces from the perspective of what you see. I think that is simply fascinating. In short I can't draw at all. My work usually becomes these weird figures, shapes, and artistic calligraphy(basically letters with arrows) lol. I am always in awe of the way others express. Despite lacking the skill of drawing I dance in addition to writing, and the theatrical arts. For me dance is like the outlet that my soul expresses emotion, and writing is the way my mind does it. Then somewhere in between poetry seeps from both areas.

Thanks for enjoying this piece

[Pax]

your most welcome... i thoroughly enjoyed reflecting on this one... its amazing...
for me dancing is like your in control of your emotions, and its always a good to someone dance to their hearts content, it is just like sketching and any other artform... all in all we do love art...

[F.Gentil]

Yes like I always say, art truly comes from the heART! lol . To release those inner emotions does so much for the human psyche. It calms us and inspires us to see the beauty within everything.