‘Feel You’

‘Feel You’

I feel
You

I reveal
Yourself
To me

Through
The seasons
Of all
Times

The mimes
The merry go
Chimes

Wasted time

Towing the
Line

All caught up
In the fragment
Of
Your mind

What’s the
Time

Remove
Blind
Becoming
Kind
To the deepest
Part
Within
Your heart

The wind it
Sings a hollow
Song
Wanting you
To follow along

Where did we
Go wrong

The streams
Of life
Fighting for
What’s right

I feel the way
You go
Only allowing
For a few
To let it
Show

Don’t let go

Deep inside you know
Find the truth
Let it grow

I’m not sure-

Do you want to let go-

Do you want to let go-

Truth of heart
Will only show

Hold on
Or
Let go...

Kelly Fagelund -Gjersoe
18 March 2018

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Hard questions in the poetry. I believe we need friendship. We need someone to care for us. Even people far away. A kind word can save a life. Thank you dear Kelly for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

My pleasure🌹

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear Kelly.

[Jon Roggie]

I like the flow of your words,
and no there is not going to be the dreaded "but".
I might be wrong, but it feels like someone trying to see from another's eyes.
Trying to understand how they feel.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Many - I write from both sides at times experiencing and watching- many thanks I appreciate it🌹

[wordman]

sad when love dies,enjoyed it

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

I’m glad you liked it thanku again 🌹

[wordman]

my pleasure

[jacob erin-cilberto]

should i stay or should i go....indecision can hurt worse than just leaving and getting the pain over with all at once.
j.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

So true are those words but if you never stay you’ll never know- sometimes we need to take that leap of faith and face the fear and do it anyway - coil miss out on the best thing if we allow fear to have its way- Thankyou again 🌹

[Sammi]

Kelly [I like that name] I cannot tell you how many times my own uncertainty made me ask stay or go I just don't know how much love to hold onto or let show, I really like your style of poetry I want to try it sometime I'll ask my poetry teacher what he thinks, what is this form called so I can tell him? You sure know how to express your feeling and emotions in some ways that really hit home -- I love this one! :)

HUGGS!
Sammi

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Thankyou for your kind words and time- I’m so glad it touched a part of you and made you reflect- questions are always good we need to delve into the deepest part of our souls to find truths lying dormant- one must only stay if it’s what the heart speaks otherwise if not honest and true it’s a lie - to yourself and the other party- blessings🌹

[Sammi]

Kelly you are so very welcome and I thank you too. :)
What is the form you wrote this poem in called?
Love and happiness.

HUGGS!
Sammi

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

You’ll laugh I don’t even know - I think a bit of freeflow Haiku - I don’t plan to do it the same all the time but that’s just how it comes and feels right that way- I’ve tried changing it but it doesn’t work - maybe one day- I just write , Feel, express , write - I’m not one for doing things by the book or a specific type- never was and never will be- glad u like it🌹

[lightsong]

This has many levels dear friend, at some points I felt You urging Your love to feel it again, the love inside his heart, at others times I felt Your are speaking to everyone, to always listen and bond with their inners, I felt You too, wandering over the seasons, with all its changing, still carrying Your core, pure and original no matter what.

these lines I dearly love...

"I reveal
Yourself
To me"

how beautiful they are, holding a mystery, trust and faith. another profound piece we are thankful for.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Thankyou for your special review again- I’m glad you found some words you connected with- 🌹

[Lyrically Inclined]

I love this! I don’t know if this is what you were going for but to me it’s poetry asking me what I want to give to it every time I write. It feels me!

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

As long as you feel alls good - Thankyou for your time🌹

[emmajoy]

A twirling of thoughts, almost mesmerising. In place of a metronome, the carousel, perhaps. The meaning of your words is passionate, near pleading but also a straight wagging of adamant finger, 'I WILL be told'

Read again, the metre is lyrical.. sometimes a little off but that's appropriate for the erratic feelins you show in your write. This really should be read, enjoyed and appreciated by a cafe of reviewers. Thank you so much for sharing.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Many thanks for you time and special review- I appreciate your depths of thought- hope you are enjoying the snowy weather we are having in UK Essex is freezing🌹

[emmajoy]

Beautiful writing.. a calm in motion, if that makes sense.

Five or more inches of snow overnight, looks so beautfiul. Stood outdoors for a few minutes.. could hear the crackle of snow feeling the pale sun's kiss.. for wantot o a little magic!!

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Enjoy- the crispy white purity reflecting upon souls🌹

[emmajoy]

To be honest, would love to find someone who wants to share a snowball fight - such fun!!

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Lol yes - I’m sure u can find someone- where are you? Go make a snow angel- I need to get some sleep been up since break if dawn🌹

[emmajoy]

Dorse callingt!
Sleep sweet dreamss

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Dorset? I did rest a bit- the snow has subsided a bit here but still very chilly enjoy your Sunday afternoon🌹

[emmajoy]

I will, doing very little, tis wonderful laziness. :) You too.