Alone In The Rain

            The sun had set far behind the horizon and was probably now rising over the other half of the once dark world to make it light again. But for now it was dark and pouring rain over the bus stop in the country side. That is where we meet him. He's sitting there, cold, freezing and soaking wet. The last bus had come again and he was stuck there. He had been visiting his mother who lived out in the country. But he had no car, the bus was his only option.

            It was late by the time he left the house and it was about a half mile walk to the first stop. He had stopped on the side of the road and watched the number seven bus whiz by as it's large wheels splashed muddy water onto him. The mud was soon washed away by by more water. He wished he could go back to his mother's, and curl up at her side like he did when he was young. But, she was in psychiatric care and he could not stay the night. Even though the bus was long gone, he walked to the stop and waited to see if a car or bus would pass by.

            Now he was sitting there, still freezing, still wet, in the still pouring rain. The pure darkness played with his head, making him think demons lured behind every corner. The stars didn't even show in the sky, the rain clouds hung dark, low and in the way. Only the claw scratch of the moon showed in the darkness of the night.

            It seemed like hours ticked by as he waited there. The rain started pouring down and he felt something hit his head lightly. He looked up to see small hunks of hail falling from the sky. He hung his head lower and hugged his gray sweatshirt closer to his body.

            The rain had suddenly stopped falling and the feeling of the hail falling into his hair was gone. He glanced upward to see what had stopped the rain and hail from battering him. An umbrella. An old wrinkled hand was clutching the black plastic of the handle. The old man smiled, his face old and wrinkled but trusting. He handed the umbrella to the boy and walked off without a word. He took the umbrella and watched the man walk off, into the darkness.

            One random act of kindness can change a life or improve one. Have you made a random act of kindness today?

Reviews

[Vanna Renee]

I love how you made the series idea thing. These are good, they make you think, but as I said in my last review, I really really wish you'd spread your writing out further

[Kena]

Very sweet and touching. I give it a two thumbs up! =)

[FullMoonInk]

Now this was really sweet. I enjoyed it a lot. It's really heartwarming to see an act of kindness and especially knowing it's disinterested and sincere. Keep up the awesome job.

[Joshua Donahue]

i really like this! it shows what kindness can still exist in the crazy world we live in today. :)

[Scott Kelly]

"Only the claw scratch of the moon showed in the darkness of the night." - Awesome line.

"The sun had set far behind the horizon and was probably now rising over the other half of the once dark world to make it light again. But for now it was dark and pouring rain over the bus stop in the country side." - I don't like this one as much. The.. "but for now it was dark.." Should be something more like, "But across the axis from that action, it was...." All combined like it is, it makes it sound like it's dark throughout the entire planet - even though I know you mean your specific location. You could develop this analogy a bit better.

Overall, solid piece and good concept. I will be checking out more. I enjoyed it.

[emily joe]

I like this a lot. It reminds me of the movie Pay it Forward. Loved the movie, loved this piece. It's amazing what a simple change in your path can do to the lives of others. I think that's why I write. Becuase you never know whose heart you're going to mend, or whose thoughts your going to change. Love this (:

[Deb deb]

You're very good for 14. Keep it up and definetely go to college and you are on your way. I will want an autograph. Great idea for a new story every week on Acts of Kindness. I look forward to reading them.

[Shelbeh-Saur-Rawr-Ness]

Amazing! I loved it! :) Keep up the amazing work Emily!

[A-Lovely-Anxiety]

Beautiful! I liked the flow of the words, it made the emotions of the boy feel raw. And I also liked the fact that it was a boy and an old man. Keep writing!!

[Odette]

I thought that it was really nice. :D I still don't understand why an old man would give some guy their umbrella, unless they wanted to die, but... I likeded it.