Arisen

Tides will turn,
Our souls will be touched by the frost.
Kings will mourn,
Those who search and know will be lost.
Drowned from the ancient flood shall rise,
The goddess shall walk down the stairway of the moon.
Actions of the brave ones will pace in her eyes,
Weak ones shall be kings very soon.
With Her tears mercy will be shed,
The rich ones shall relinquish of the throne.
All Her thoughts won't left unsaid,
She, as the mighty goddess will be known.

Author's Note

Thank you for reading :D

Reviews

[Aehr]

Love your imagination here. You've created a beautiful painting for us. There's this very cool, calm and smooth, almost royal and dignified feel to the poem. My favourite line was, 'The goddess shall walk down the stairway of the moon.'. The feel lingers at the end, leaving us wondering what happens next. Loving the title. Shelving it. Xx.

[R.A. Youngblood]

It is, yeah, thank you very much! :D

[Aarontastic]

Very cool poem, it made me think of Game of Thrones for some reason XD My only criticism is in the penultimate line, it's a bit of a stretch to say "all her thoughts won't left unsaid" - without 'be' in there, it is kind of an odd line, but I know you wanted to keep the flow and meter going, and I still get your meaning, so it's not a big deal. Nicely done, nice atmosphere.

[R.A. Youngblood]

Everyone likes to watch Game of Thrones..but that s**t is to mainstream for me..I'm such a hipster lol. Yeah, I guess. Thanks dude. :3

[patricia]

a reflecting poem full of images and creates a curiosity in the reader. Apart from a couple of words that jar a little, and one that seems to be missing. This poem run through another draft has great potential.

[R.A. Youngblood]

Thank you very much :D

[forevermore1218]

this is really beautiful and I regret not reading it sooner. Very sorry for the late review.
well done :)

[R.A. Youngblood]

There's no need to be sorry yo. Thank you very much! :D

[Enigma]

Ah. Beautiful. A sense of foreboding mixed with a sense of hope and mercy and salvation. Well penned.

[R.A. Youngblood]

Thank you :D

[Shaquana Adams]

I enjoyed the story within this poem. Nicely penned :)

[R.A. Youngblood]

Thank you very much :3

[Ruth]

A new era, or perhaps an era that resonates through us all but some feel it more in this modern world, beautifully done! x

[R.A. Youngblood]

Thank you very much! :D

[TPK Stories]

Loved the story in this poetry. Nice work.

[R.A. Youngblood]

Thank you :D

[Coyote Poetry]

Quite a story in the short poetry. I like the artwork. Gave life to the words and thoughts. I did like the ending to the poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[R.A. Youngblood]

Thank you very much :D