Bird with broken wings

Do you see the poet in me,
on the wings of eternity
who sails in the distance?
Do you see the artist in me,
who's in the long night
painting the blue dreams?
I'm not a poet.
I don't know to write a song to you.
I'm not a painter who can paint this blue
night dressed in black.
I'm just a bird with broken wings.

You're only a flame of a candle who extinguishes,

a flame who silently illuminates the night.

And when i close my eyes i still see your face

I know then that the pain will go away.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Poet and painter can make a world more beautiful. I like the thoughts in the poem.
"You're only a flame of a candle who extinguishes,
a flame who silently illuminates the night."
Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[that-little-green-monst..]

Wonderful job! This is such a beautiful poem. I love the lines "You're only a flame of a candle who extinguishes,
a flame who silently illuminates the night."

[MoriartyMesa]

Wheels in the sky,

Flames scream wide,

eye's on broken wing's

questions raised, but this one offers nothing but praise.

[Hippy]

truly remarkable, this is an amazing poem, so short yet powerful, i love the imagery, painting the black sky blue and comparing a candle to what is probably a lover. i do say excellent job

there are just two issues i have, first one is when you say you are not a poet and don't know to write a song to you, i just feel you should say you don't know HOW to
second in the line "I'm not a painter who can paint the blue
night dressed in black."
i am not satisfied with it, like to me it seems to just run on and hard to comprehend
my suggestion would be
I'm not a painter who can paint blue
this night dressed in black.

but that may defeat what you are trying to say, overall it is your poem, you don't have to listen to me, it is clear you are doing a great job

[Wondering Mind]

Excellent expression! To me, or for me, this is to my muse.

[The BiXXX]

Honestly this left me speechless it's really good and artistic!

[bluessadmood]

I love the questionaire..
do you see the poet in me,do you see how i died a thousand times
how i dreamed my whole life,how i though i never really exist
how tormented am i and all the time..just to make them words
so beautiful and magical so i bring you close ,and you be mine
lonely long nights i sit and write,the paper really did shine
the words did light my darkness and i could see you in whole
i could bring you to life and i could reach for you,just with my words
they are the only way to keep you near,and holding you forever
i really loved this ,how it gave me so much inspiration
lovely write..

[pinpen]

i can feel this write, deep and powerful. enjoyed this. so full of vivid emotions.

[None]

Niiiiice. I love the asking rhythm of this piece and the lyric beauty of its images. The setting and the language compliment each other so wonderfully. In so many ways, its like a dream. Beautiful.

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Good imagery, awesome poem!
I'd say I see the poet in you! :)