I was

I was aimlessly wandering on the gardens of freedom.

One owl was announced it's flight,

and sent a kiss to the dark.

Gold smell of the incense was pulling the sea on the violin strings,

and wrapped with the scarf of wind, it was walking with sails of love.

Moon leaned it's head,

and darkness was preserving it from my pain.

On my palm scent and warmth of his hand has remained.

I drew a heart with wooden pen on the yellow paper,

and i put it in the box at the top of my unread books,

and shut it for indefinite time.

Yes, i was your butterfly,

i was your little drop of dew.

I was your quiver at the cold nights,

sigh of your mouth.

I was that butterfly

who's wings touched your lips.

I was that mischievous wind who's passed through your hair.

Yes, i was your fire at the cold winter.

Yes, i was..

Reviews

[BLBrown]

Roberta,

Another good piece!! I love:

Yes, i was your butterfly,
i was your little drop of dew.
I was your quiver at the cold nights,
sigh of your mouth.
I was that butterfly
who's wings touched your lips.

This created strong visualization, even in the abstract. Keep writing my dear!!

[Mellie]

What a great piece.

[Jayren]

Good work, very creative

[Brittany]

Beautiful imagery

[Karen666]

i love this piece

[Devon]

This is wonderful and beautiful. You have a way with words that definitely puts a magnificent picture in my mind.

:)

[Devons]

A warm and wondrous world of bliss has been painted here, with rich strokes of colour and feeling, creating a dream-like sensation like a warm breeze through billowing cotton drapes on a summer's night. A charming piece of writing, with endearing imagery and atmosphere.

[Wondering Mind]

The sad part of this beautiful piece is the "i was"...

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Wow, ovo je odlično! Moram priznati da sam čitajući tvoje pjesme primjetio nekakav "tvoj stil" u njima, tako da se vidi da si baš ti napisala pjesmu. I to je super! :)
Ova misao "Yes, I was..." na kraju mi je predobra, pošto ističe činjenicu da se to sve dogodilo u prošlosti, što znači da toga više nema.

[bluessadmood]

ohh what lovely chain of thoughts ,i ve written many like this
walking free under God night sky,enjoying my days and nights
when suddenly like the earth has changed color ,and sky was black
and i succumbed to its call,called love,i touched to please
i ached so you rejoice,i had bad days to brighten yours
i again and again died so you live again,i closed my mouth
just to hear you whatever you say,i did it all for you,like i died
lovely in everything..

[Pavithra]

Super visualization...this is one piece that brings a lot of images to life...very well written..