Dead rhymes

I wanted to write a poem about life,

but heavy thoughts bridled my letters,

there's hours passing by, and i just don't got any word,

just a mute poet's inspiration.

I'm just writing rhymes and say nothing,

i'm checking every word for a hundred times,

and there's plenty of place on the paper.

With a trembling hand i'm stacking the dead rhymes.

Go away you rhymes, which are adorned with gap,

i said all i had to say,

silence swallowed me who's woven into the pen,

i'm not writing a verse bigger than the life.

Reviews

[Raven Starhawk]

I think I have read this close to ten times and still am unsure how to process all these racing thoughts. I can relate. That is what I need to say because it is so true. Sometimes poetry is dead to me and then again so is writing in general. It is like some people expect too much. And when you don't deliver what they are looking for it is like you lost a friend. I may not make much sense but I am in this state right now where writing is a frustrating task.

[Wild Willow Blue]

As do I. I think all poets do. Real poets are all a little dark, some more than others, and I think you've captured some of that here. Great job.

[ghost writer]

It is the curse of the poet, writer, scribe...the dreaded block..

[The Siren]

I felt this way just last night. It really sucks, right? Anyway, I decided to write something like this but couldn't. So the fact that you did shows how good you are! This is actually really really nice. I love it!

[Sunset Girl]

I understand when how it can be when you want to write about something, but just can't seem to. I sometimes find myself starting a few poems just to get the thoughts out of my head so I can focus on what I really want to write.

[Yara]

Every writer's thoughts, I think. Or maybe not, but sometimes I feel the exact same! (:

[Lovely Soul]

Nice write.

[poeticpiers]

Rhymes bring poetry to life along with meter the most important ingredient
Without rhymes and meter you merely write prose However beautiful however heart felt. Having sais that you express your feelings with great clarit

[The White Wolf]

Oh, yeah, I have been there. I have found it is better to just walk away from those dead rhymes until they resuscitate themselves instead of us giving them CPR.

[The Flame of the Knight]

I like it.... This is how i feel sometimes too.........

[Myself]

this is just a amazing write. i love how to put everything you feel in your writings