A Sinner's Confession

Special prayers for forgiveness

A Sinner's Confession 
 

Oh dear Lord to you I pray On this New Years Day In my special way  In my own words, I must say Dear Lord come closer  Lend me your ear I do not want to speak to loud For I do not want others to hear For I am a shameful sinner In my heart mind and soul I try to hold your Sacred Heart near In the middle of my prayers, My eyes fill up with tears I know down deep Lord you really care For yours is the shoulder to cry upon When everyone else has left my side and now are gone And I known in you a new life can start again Rising me up much higher than ever before In your mercy seat, I will sit And pay great attention as you pray over my soul To raise it up past the opening in heaven's gates For your Grace is enough to save my soul Forever and always Oh Lord of peace and grace Thanks for pardoning my sins  As you shed your precious blood on the cross In Jesus Christ Name I say Amen.

Reviews

[poetgurl]

For your Grace is enough to save my soul
Forever and always Oh Lord of peace and grace
Thanks for pardoning my sins
As you shed your precious blood on the cross
In Jesus Christ Name I say Amen.

I really love this part, this is one amazing write.
I must say Amen!

[Jes' Pi]

Hello.

Your poem is very powerful and touching. You chose a very emotional topic and you applied it in a very good way.

Now, let's talk a little about the grammar. You don't have many mistakes but they are kinda critical.

The first stanza, last verse: "In my own words I must say". You should add a comma after the word "words" (use a comma when a pause is necessary)

The second stanza, third verse: "I do not want to speak to loud". The correct form is here is "too". (Too is an adverb that means to a higher degree, in addition, etc.)

Third stanza, fourth verse: "In the mist of my prayers My eyes fill up with tears" I think you should add another comma after the word "prayers"

Also, subjectively, I think that the word "mist" doesn't fit in the context. Maybe you should replace it with "midst"...?

Fifth stanza, second verse: "In your mercy seat I will sit" You should add a comma after the word "seat".

Fifth stanza, fourth verse: "To raise it up past the opening in heaven's gates". You have to replace "in" with "of"(choose prepositions carefully, because if there is a mistaken proposition, it can change the proposition)

Fifth stanza, second verse: "In your mercy seat, I will sit". A hyphen is required (mercy-seat).

Overall, it is a very good and powerful poem (just like I said before), raw emotion is merging with the reader. Grammar mistakes are a problem for everyone (even for me) and they can be corrected, no worry.

Good luck!

[Falcon1]

Thanks I will take my time and correct my mishaps and will make a better read out of this poem. Thanks for your review.

[Jes' Pi]

You're welcome!

[Coyote Poetry]

I need to say the same prayer my friend. Powerful and worthwhile words and thoughts.
Coyote