Rise to Power

My tendencies 

Overruled by necessities

I still b***h for death

Even though that’s not what I want.

An exit and a door.

A door to show me how to

To keep this f*****g fake side up

The exit. 

The exit from this hell.

I want to go f*****g crazy.

I feel all of this insecurity

Mixed with a certain amount of sympathy.

That’s what’s draining my empathy

I feel so bad for these sad fuckers.

Trying to bring me down.

I’ve arisen 

A Fallen Hero has arisen.

Just to slay whoever steps in my path

Or stabs my back.

Never again will I bow to those fuckers.

Hell, never again will I shed a tear.

I’m happy whether they like it or not.

I wish for the strength to not go and do this

There’s too much for me here. 

I don’t want to waste it.

I want to waste my time though

A Fallen Hero - Rise to Power

Written : 16/01/2011

Dedication : Undedicated

Author's Note

Just something PoetGirl got me thinking of.. Been meaning to write something like this for a while but writers block you know,...

Honest opinion

A Fallen Hero

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

We must rise from the ashes stronger and wiser. Life can seem unfair. But a strong person will find new purpose and people. I like the emotion in this poem.
"Never again will I bow to those fuckers.
Hell, never again will I shed a tear.
I’m happy whether they like it or not."
A poem with strong words and a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Undying Glory]

great work here man! this sure was powerful and that title sure nailed it. about time we all stood up for ourselves against those who just want to see us bleed.
this sure was nice work. this reminded me of "Spit It Out" by Slipknot, because of the whole message of this one. nice work!!

[E.H. Monroe]

Another scoop of black death and doom metal from the King of Denmark. The wasted/unwasted time and the inevitibility of the push/pull of the daily world is alll in here.

Nice job

[Chelsea]

haha so cool I''m in the authors' note!!
Really well done! I can feel your emotion behind this one for sure--- really strong!

I really like his message, fighting back! Using the anger against the forces to rise against them! Really powerful!

Awesome!!

[OT]

yes!! now this is what I was saying to you a while back - fight back!! don't take it, show you can fight back against the forces of whatever!! and you're definitely improving this had a very strong flow, the content was spot on, and the imagery much more solid and explored than some of your older stuff!! up it a little more, find strange and strong images to contrast with and remove a few words ("to To" in lines 6/7 - messes with the enjambment a bit and doesn't read easily)! but this was really good!! getting better all the time!! also I'd delete the last line altogether!

[Drako]

the ending confused me. you want to waste your time? that's a little strange

but otherwise, i like how you're using your anger to pull yourself up. there is too much for you here to think about death. i like the message in this a little better

[robyn.alexandra]

The raw emotition and power are there, I can feel it as I read.
Every time I read what you write the flow gets better. But I still think you need to explore these images more!
I really feel your anger here and your definately improving!!