The Unending..

“It’s nice to see you in a new light”

Well..

It’s nothing new..

I’m just even more fucked than before..

Or so I think…

Even though I feel happier than ever..

I managed to snap an innocent girl in two..

Or at least her heart that is..

 

I’ve been torn apart by guilt..

But I have to think of myself..

Right?..

 

I’m headed for a chance to heal..

Or so I think..

As Justin Vernon quietly sings in the background I wonder..

What am I actually..

Fucked up..

That’s my best guess..

 

I’m cold like the wind..

I just want to lie down really..

But still I just have to keep standing..

Losing the insightful struggle with myself..

 

Falling deeper and deeper..

Nothing’s to gain..

Nothing’s to learn..

Everything burns me so cold..

And I don’t care anymore..

I’ve given up hoping to get better..

I just have to try..

 

It’s like I’m locked in a cage like a baby..

I can’t follow my own line of thought anymore..

Reviews

[K-mo]

this is very good, it shows true emotion and that makes for really good poems

[Ashley Rivers :)]

Great job! :D
I loved this and I think some people can relate.

[Caradoc]

My favorite line is;

"Everything burns me so cold.."

This reminds me of how I felt a while back. In fact, even though I haven't read a lot of your stuff in a while, the other two poems I read remind me of stuff I've written. Perhaps if I read more I'll get a little inspiration for myself.

This poem is so caught up in self doubt, and self loathing. A lot of pain. I don't know you, so I can't tell you anything truly meaningful to help. All I can comment on is the quality of the poem itself. The seeming disjointedness of your thoughts ends such realism to the poem. It's something I think others can relate to, in a way. I also see much potential for evoking emotion in readers. Which is what art is supposed to do. In that regard, well done.

-Caradoc

[stars are far]

This was so great ..
keep that up

[Coyote Poetry]

Life allow us to move forward. Sometime we swim in s**t. Other times we are content and happy. I like the thoughts in the poem. Most of us are trying to figure the good and the right place to be. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Dayran]

You certainly sound very preoccupied in your mind. But it appears to me, you are coming round again to the social company and say hello to everyone. Its nice to hear from you once in a while. Nice write!

[Mrs. Wolf]

The first line in your first stanza... isn't that what I said to you in my last review on your poem "Essentiality"? Anyways, Fallen, you're so locked up in your hate and sorrow for the world that it seems you're afraid to love someone so fragile because you're afraid your unrelenting loathing of the world will destroy her. It's really sweet to see you come out of that shell and wear your heart on your sleeve. I can tell you'd really do anything for "her".

As always, I'm a fan. Great work. :)