Speaking Shoes

They are judging my master

and his journey,

wearing me while he is walking,

he tears up the obstacles but still they're stalking.

Don't judge my master,

unless you wear me.

Don't judge his journey,

unless you don't have any idea what he's going through.

he will make it,

yes, he will make it.

Reviews

[Karisha Nove]

This is some kind of loyalty towards a person. Asking repeatedly not to judge someone by outer surface until you don't know everything. I get that feeling... I love it...

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thanks so much 😊

[richieb]

Farhan,
I loved this poem. I am a firm believer in not judging a person on their outward appearances. You hit the nail on the head with this work. Thank you.
Richie b.

[Farhan Shaikh]

That's really kind Richie..and good to see you after long time..

[Zoya]

Great concept. The way you've shown the shoes speaking, saying all those things, indirectly praising his master's struggle through this world, is very much applaudable. Very well written!

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you Zoe ☺

[Zoya]

No problem

[CAPOLAVORO]

It truly gives meaning towards empathy rather than sympathy. Giving the shoes a life is a good idea. Anthropomorphism is spotted on. Well done. :)

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank yo soo much

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Well composed! Based on reality and true as well.
Judging characters might prove wrong at times.

[Farhan Shaikh]

Yep.Tazeen thank you for your visit

[Fahmida Mehreen]

Don't judge my master,

unless you wear me.

Don't judge his journey,

unless you don't have any idea what he's going through.

It is a brutal world. Most people will read this, nod their head, appraise and say, "very true". But, its comprehension will still be like a floating grey cloud.

Totally appreciate your writing. Now, how you shall see my appreciation: your call. :)

[Farhan Shaikh]

You are absolutely right Fahmida, even I thought for once before writing this "i am writing on some thing that will never change" ..btw thank you for your appreciation and review☺

[Mr.Writer]

Very cool and engaging Farhan! I really like all your pieces of writing as they have effort in them :)
As Jessica said, some word choices may need to be changed, but overall very good!
"wearing me he is walking,"
Maybe it can be changed to "Wearing me while he's walking"
Just some feedback :)

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you so much shaan..😊

[Jessica Lima]

Your diction needs some work. I am the kind of person that gets distracted by the smallest thing and that prevents me from appreciating certain styles of writing.

[Farhan Shaikh]

You're right Jessica..i really need to improve..n I will

[Jessica Lima]

I have no doubt you will! :)

[Najam Us Saher]

There's a saying 'Put yourself on other's shoes' to understand that person. This is such a unique poem I loved the concept. Beautifully written I liked it a lot.

[Farhan Shaikh]

I'm glad u liked it saher

[Surya]

He will make it and he can, if he have will to do so...:)

[Farhan Shaikh]

Correct Surya..thank you