To the Sea

Traveling faster than the speed of light

She grabs my hand and we take flight.

Below the city twinkles light,

Larger than the sun and just as bright.

She gasps and traces her hand in the mist.

While the other gradually tightens around my wrist.

She is happy and content, faithfully holding on.

While I cry knowing what’s going on.

I see the signs passing by so fast.

Just trying to make the moment last.

That’s when I notice that I’m grabbing nothing but air

For in realty I realize, she was never really there.

I wander the crowded streets, not as bright now.

I move around people keeping my head in a bow.

All I need is some clean, soft ocean breeze,

Too put my sad troubled heart finally at ease.

I listen to the wave’s crash against the rock.

And the fishermen cry out near the docks.

And I see her standing, she starts walking closer to me.

I smile, I turn, and head out towards sea.

 

Reviews

[Crifa]

Gallons.
Gall-
Ons.
I heard about this one but I thought eh can't beat his others and I put it off, not wanting to be disappointed. But man am I not disappointed I'm the opposite I am very impressed. I loved the wording so much and how each line linked to the next like a never ending chain. Even the ones that didn't rhyme linked! Usually I pick one line (usually the last is best) but it's like this is a whole poem of last liners! Great job bro keep it up

[Sunshadow Coyote]

dng dude thkss!

[Clockwork]

I like the end rhymes here. You don't get caught up rhyming just to rhyme like so many on the WC. Each rhyme has a purpose and a gravity. Each rhyme ripples like the waves of the ocean that the speaker of this poem is drawn to in the end.

It is interesting to me how our memories take us by the hand and walk us along the threads of time that we have already walked. Oh those we love, how they leave traces of their souls upon us so we can remember the depth and breath of their souls, the contact of their bodies.

[Sunshadow Coyote]

Thanks i appreciate it!

[Clockwork]

Your welcome!

[LoveDens]

Cute...but sad...but true...

[Odayin]

I love it.
I really do.
It almost seemed like a little inspiration from "Fading Dreams" was in there, but that might just be me.
Anyway, your rhyme and rhythm were excellent but your meaning was marvelous. The whole time you knew what was behind it all, but yet it was almost like you were creating an illusion from the mist you were trapped in. The las line is a perfect example of strength, and will. Letting go...when you want to stay, but know it's right to move on

[Sunshadow Coyote]

i knew you would...i decided to bring back some rythm and rhyme again

[Sunshadow Coyote]

and yes i stole one line from you becuase it was my fav you ever wrote...i hope you dont mind

[Odayin]

Haha nah as long as I get credit..which I have.
And yeah..it's my favorite ive ever written too