Fragile

 

Fragile.

 

Every day I put on a fake smile,

So people cant see that my thoughts are vile.

I watch others find their soulmates,

I cant comprehend how that feeling tastes.

 

I'm sitting all alone.

To depression, I am prone.

My mind is almost numb.

I wait for my true love to come.

 

I see that my mind is fragile.

My weak heart beats in denial.

My mind says my race is run,

My heart says its just begun.

Author's Note

Ugh this is frustrating...No matter how hard I try I cant completely explain how I feel. This is just a small fraction of the pain I feel, its almost nothing.

Reviews

[Lilly]

I must say - I know how this feels all to well - you're right it is very hard to express but I think you have done very well with this piece - only one thing to fix as far as I can see - in the first stanza 'comprihend' should be spelt 'comprehend'

great work with this

[rockinmiley555]

ugh i hate this feeling!! whatever the situation is, though, youll make through it :) trust me.

the poem itself is filled with honesty, pain, and truthfullness. i really enjoyed this one :)

[carlyraye 96]

I KNOW EXACTALLY WHAT YOUR TALKING ABOOUT sorry my caps were on lol anyways, its not easy to find lovee, buy your young, you will find your soul mate oneday, but that one day just mite not be today...it could be tomarow..

[Katie]

Sometimes it is really hard to express an emotion you feel so strongly about, and that is by far the most frustrating of all.. This was beautiful portrayed. I feel your pain.

This is a good expression of yourself. Feeling alone is never easy. Some day you will not be. That is something to strive for. Sometimes we can be with that someone and still be all alone, that sucks.

[Keevan]

Now how this feels. I hate how it feels, also, and it's very hard to write down this feeling exactly. What makes this a good poem is that most people can relate.

[Coyote Poetry]

Life is a pain in the butt. Never fast enough to get where we want to be. I can feel the frustration and yearning for something to happen. A excellent poem.
Thank you.
Coyote

[Chelsea.]

I used to feel like this. I understand what you're trying to say, but maybe in order to express how you truely feel you could try a free verse poem? I find them sometimes easier to describe feelings than a rhyming poem. But overall, this is good :)

[Felicity Winter]

I like this, a great write!

[Poetic Beauty]

Most know days like this a few times in their life. It gets better when you get older. hang in there. Life is about the journey not the destination. The poem is wonderful. The flow is easy to read and you have captured the emotions that go with longing and rejection. Add in yearning and this is your poem. It is great that you are using poetry to get your emotions out. Writing helps with that. I'm not good at free form poems but if you are struggling to get your emotions out and feel limited with rhyming poems try free form. That might help or write a fictional story that isn't really fiction to get those feeling across. I think you did a wonderful job making people feel the frustration, rejection and all those awful emotions in this poem. Keep writing. It helps.

[An owl on the moon]

What a brilliant expression of pain, the depth of life in the darkness. And the ending still has that breath of hope. What an amazing write... I've been there...