Silver Lining

Honestly came up with, and wrote all this in a time frame of 7 minutes. Am I good or what. Honestly I want to know if I'm good or not. ;)

A silver lining to every cloud
Knowing that my voice still remains loud
A gold heart belongs to every child
But only for those that smiled
So the light of day will stay
Never breaking or giving way
Till the darkness of the night
I shall forget about my plight

Reviews

[Aethereal]

Your poem has a good theme, but it lacks meter to make it flow and sing. None-the-less, it inspired me to write this gift song-poem for you to keep as your own. It’s in 1/0/1/0/1/0/1/0/1 nine syllable meter; 1 = accent; 0 = non-accent: Sing along:

Silver Linings

Look for silver linings in the clouds.
There are new friends lost within large crowds.
There’s a golden heart within each child,
and in every storm a place that’s mild.

Somewhere in the glaring light of day,
a bright butterfly shall come your way.
In the deepest darkness of the night,
you’ll find stars to be your guiding light.

[FireFox9]

You have my permission to put that on the website if you want since it's different yet similar. Also it's better then mine.

[FireFox9]

Also thanks for the opinion since I've only been doing this for about a month and a half. Try reading some of my other poems though since most are better then this one

[Aethereal]

All I did was use your theme, and then apply classical meter to it. It only took me a few minuets to write. I'm not going to place it on a website. You my do with it as you like.

[Aethereal]

Which one is your best, Matt! You don't seem to use classical meter, but your themes and ideas are great.

[FireFox9]

Well people seem to love The Price of Freedom, Dreams to Reality, and My Love is Lost, I really like Spirits since it was my first poem.

[Aethereal]

I've taken note of those poem, Matt. I'll get back to you on them. Do they follow some kind of classical meter, or are they just rhyming free verse. If you read any of my poems you're find most of them to be written in classical meter to such a degree that they sing like songs..

[FireFox9]

No they're just rhyming free verse since I prefer to write that way. Most other ways are difficult for me to write but I plan to try some new styles of writing some time soon.

[Aethereal]

If your intention is to write rhyming free verse, then you have succeeded at your task, but most everyone does this since it’s so easy to do. As for me, I like the challenge of climbing poetic mountains. All you’re doing here is giving away your themes and ideas to other poets who may be motivated to write their own classical version of them in metered rhyme.

[FireFox9]

That is kind of the point since I enjoy the idea of having my poems inspiring other's to write something similar since it also shows that they like the poem. Like the name of one of my poems it's all about Perception.

[Aethereal]

Yes, but why not go the extra step, and develop your poems in a classical way, or as song-poems? You're building house frames, and then leaving the rest of the house unfinished. Even non-rhyming free verse should have meter if it is to flow properly with some kind of rhythm unless your goal is to write a discordant poems to express a discordant moods or thoughts. Poems put meter into perception.

[Stephen]

Hey, Pal .. I love the beats of your rhyme .. Your stuffs are pretty interesting in reading. I simply enjoyed reading this poem. Keep it up the good work!

[Sami Khalil]

This was wonderful. You still remain the voice...Bravo.....................

[FireFox9]

Thank you I've never thought of myself like that and it's nice to know that someone does.

[Sami Khalil]

I do. You are welcome muchly...:).........................

[Bluefire]

This is pretty good. I like the imagery and light to it.
Like somebody blew all the gray clouds away, had some fun in the sunshine and retired for the night, hopeful for a bright tomorrow.
Well done. ^^