____ Another year, Gosh ____

Well, definitely not a haiku...tried but aaghhh...am not an expert so!!!

Everyone had the cake

He lives another year

 

I need to puke

 

Reviews

[Helena]

Hahaa, I've just read all the other reviews. You have everyone guessing about this one. I guess we can all put our own interpretation on it and never really get to the bottom of it! I loved the kind of short and crisp kind of shock feature of this.....it was good!

Yes I liked this little piece,( not cake! ) of writing lol! Didn't seem like a very nice cake at that, if everyone had to puke after it!!

Seriously though.....add a couple of more words here and there and make it :

1st line 5 syllables

2nd line 7 syllables

3rd line 5 syllables ~ Then you have your Haiku my friend!

Know it all aren't I? Hope it helps! rotfl

KIndest regards

Helena :) :)

OH......AND HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!!

[Tony]

As Helena said above, ...short and crisp kind of shock.....
Yes, that's it. And that is good of course....
It was also slightly provoking....which is what I like.
Attempted Haiku:
B

[Rain]

I don't know why I chose this piece to read, but I'm glad I did. For some reason it just cracked me up. I don't write Haiku's. I just loved the short bluntness of it. lol. You have a sense of humor, and I like that. Rain..

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5~7~5..........ah an almost Haiku. And an interesting one at that.

[~Haute*Cocoa~]

who were you trying to kill? haha j/k! i like the tongue-in-cheek coyness of it, and i normally hate haikus but this is very nice and different!

[closed account]

awwe, how sad,, now come on now, birthdays are not so bad...

[Rebecca Hope Rouston]

Well, that's simple.
But it gets the point across. (:

[Melanie Jane Boicourt S..]

It is not a Haiku but it is cute.
Love All, Mejasha

[An Ordinary Woman]

LOL Happy Birthday! and I know, I often feel the same way. This cute and quite creative. I enjoyed ....

[Brianna Brie]

Reading other people's comments only adds to this piece. At first I thought wow he really doesn't like that guy very much. Wishing he would just drop dead already. Sad to say that one person comes to mind when reading this one. It could be like one of those funny birthday cards perhaps with a picture of puke on the front. lol Thanks for entering my contest.