I hate the night.

I wrote this at 3 AM last night during a terrible bought of depression and insomnia.

It's a quarter past one. I wish you were here.

Just someone to see me, let alone hold me dear.

I'm smiling, yet drowning, in love and in life.

I turn off the light and I pick up the knife.

 

I'm crying, I'm dying, and it's barely two.

And I'm just curled up and wishing, and missing you.

Your embrace--just your face--it's a pained, hopeless dream.

Inside my head, unheard, I curse and I scream.

 

It's nearly three, and I'm nearly gone.

No reason to live or to love or go on.

There's blood on the knife, and there's blood on my arm.

There's nothing left but black holes and self-harm.

 

It's five to four, and I'm beyond all repair.

You know that I'm dying but you just must not care.

I'm trying to stay silent as I trace lines in my wrist,

But I think, I don't want to be doing this.

 

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Honorable Mention

Jun 23, 2010

• Intense Rhyming Poems
• I hate the night.

Second

Aug 7, 2010

• Midnight
• I hate the night.

Reviews

[Mizuki Tsukiakari]

It's very well written. I liked that it rhymed. Good job! ;p

[Annie29]

This is great (:

[Wolfwind Words]

I love the poem for it's emotional flow and soulfelt cry...and in response it does make me sigh.

When at half past one in another time under the sun
There is a place that bubbles and pourith good fun
Where shadows become puppets with gold bright hair
And pain turns to rivers of Koolaid, with friends to share
Then by five, when the sun begins to peek
Through misty morning clouds and rainbow guides to what you seek.

What can I say...I'm an optimist!

Good poetry!
Hugs!
Wolfie

[Kaotic Barbie]

Very good write. You are very talented obviously. It's hard when you get hurt by another...I have felt these very feelings.

[Rain]

Wow, I really liked this poem. Putting in the times in the first line of each stanza is very smart. Nice job on rhyming and rhythm...something I find really hard. Rhyming can sometimes ruin the flow, though yours was just perfect.

A great read. Keep up the good work!