State of a Living Dream

I wrote this when I was feeling VERY STRANGE at about 2am.....therefore the end result was VERY STRANGE. Basically, I'm talking about the numdness/pain/good stuff I was feeling at the time.

Heart-rate elevated

Minor headache in the back

Feeling of losing myself

All in the wonderful pain

Sweet Bliss of Nothing

So Beautiful people

Look the other way now

Dripping into the faucet

Down the Drain I go

Raining slashes and slices

Clouds are taking You away

Eyes seeing Car-Crash Hearts

None hear the Music play

I must in order to sing Love away

So far away the breeze Lies

Laughter needs Tragedy

Sad Song playing

About time.

Author's Note

I tried to mess around with capitalization in this, tell me what you think of it. (Every capital word is significant except the beginning of lines.)

Reviews

[Lauryn Nicole]

it is kind of weird...but I really really like it! I like what you did with the capitals, it gives the piece this kind of structure? Idk how to explain it. But I really do like it! Alot! You should write crazy, spontaneous writings at two in the morning more often, it makes for crazy, random, weird, wonderful poems.







Keep writing!
L a u r y n

[Princy]

Mixed feelings usually turn into strange writings but they have a certatin uniqueness which makes it an art.

[Sincerely, Alex]

I ADORE the ending.

You are an amazing writer. I'm gonna kiss you now since you're right beside me.
xD

I love you darling.

Alex

[Aekmy]

Again, a great piece filled with emotion, but I don't see the point of capitalizing...?

It's still a great piece. (:

-Mary
The Only Exception

[Sean M. Addams]

i liked this alot very creative and liked the imagery in this alot.... kind of deep in parts but overall a well done piece..nice job on this

[deeps]

I like this, I think this is wonderful.
I can feel the emotions in this.

[Dreamer (Kristen)]

I like it, even though it's strange. Though my opinion is also that at the sentence: "Down the Drain I go", drain shouldn't be written captilized. I get why you wrote it with in capitalization, but I don't find it fitting....



Keep smiling!!