Drown

Drown

A Poem by Alisa_the_fluff_ball
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short....and......metaphorical....and.....short.

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I smile at a memory

 

Then cry at the thought

 

And think of the possibility

 

That you could make me

 

 

Drown.


© 2010 Alisa_the_fluff_ball



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I loved this. So subtle, yet so evocative. This poem seemed to sneak up on me without me realising, and it really wasn't until the end that I realised the depth and perception that this piece held. Both beautiful and heartbreaking at the same time. Nice work,
~PaperHearts

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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and beautiful

Posted 6 Years Ago


21 words expressing an ocean of feelings? Amazing. Wonderful job.

Posted 7 Years Ago


I loved this. So subtle, yet so evocative. This poem seemed to sneak up on me without me realising, and it really wasn't until the end that I realised the depth and perception that this piece held. Both beautiful and heartbreaking at the same time. Nice work,
~PaperHearts

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Short yet meaningful.
"I smile at the memory
Then cry at the thought"
Did I mention relative? Fantastic job! :D

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

.....
I am going to hug you now.

-gets off couch and hugs you in the chair-

I am going to to have these lines floating around in my head now. They are magnificent,
The simplicty of this and placing of the words are so extremely powerful...
Amazing.



Posted 7 Years Ago


The line spacing is excellent, and it was short and to the point. But the words really speak in that short amount of time and that takes immense talent if you ask me. I just love it so much that I really can't express it in words but truly this is just...moving.


Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like this, it was really short and to the point, I ike the spacing of the lines, especially that last one. Well written.

Luna

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Alisa_the_fluff_ball
Alisa_the_fluff_ball

Ow. My life. It hurts.



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Hello all! My name is Alisa. I live to sing and to write. I am bisexual, if you have a problem with that, then please save us all the trouble and navigate away from this page. My style changes daily, .. more..

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