2:07am

2:07am

A Poem by Alisa_the_fluff_ball
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Loving someone deeply while being with another.

"

I miss you,

But you'll never know.

Instead I'll wrap myself

In his kisses,

And blush

As my heart races

At his words.

You're still my everything,

And I'll never know

What I am to you.

At least

I can be

His nothing,

And know it.

You have me over Break,

And all the days between.

He's got his arms

Around me,

While your lips

Press against my soul.

Its 2:07,

And baby

I'm in heaven.


© 2010 Alisa_the_fluff_ball



Author's Note

Alisa_the_fluff_ball
The title came from the fact it was 2:07am when I finished this. I tried to do something different with the line breaks, let me know what you think.

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HOLY FREAKING FLIP-FLOPS!!!

....

-goes to cut arm off due to being your tiny suitcase next to you being my suitcase-

Yes. You are my suitcase. That is how epic this is.
I LOVE THE TITLE AND THE ENDING!!
(it has a seven in it, so that makes me even more happy.)
I think you painted the clearest picture.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Amazing write! I loved the line breaks in this piece, and thought that it worked really effectively in creating the perfect pace for a poem. From the second I read the title of this piece, I was immediately drawn in, and the rest of the poem certainly didn't disappoint. There was a real sense of desperation and conflict in this piece that I could relate to, and I thought that you expressed that beautifully. Absolutely loved the last line! :)
~PaperHearts

Posted 7 Years Ago


A lovely and deeply emotional piece that allows the reader to know exactly how you feel even though we dont know the full story. 'While your lips press against my soul' - genius. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i agree, the ending is outstanding! i absolutley love the "while your lips press against my soul"
amazing poetry.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very nicely done, I love the ending and the whole flow of the whole piece. You really feel the pull of the speakers heart between these two different people. Great work! :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"I'm in heaven."
LOVED THE WAY IT ENDED and loved how it was (sort of) a random time! Pretty amazing! :D

"He's got his arms

Around me,

While your lips

Press against my soul.

Its 2:07,

And baby

I'm in heaven."
Just had to re-post it, I'm in love with those lines! lol
Fantastic job!!! X)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow... in all honesty the picture says as much as the poem, which is amazing because that's what gave me the idea of what the poem was about in the first place. Absolutely amazing if you ask me, I can's believe how much I can relate to this, it's freaky. Great job.

Luna

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

HOLY FREAKING FLIP-FLOPS!!!

....

-goes to cut arm off due to being your tiny suitcase next to you being my suitcase-

Yes. You are my suitcase. That is how epic this is.
I LOVE THE TITLE AND THE ENDING!!
(it has a seven in it, so that makes me even more happy.)
I think you painted the clearest picture.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Ow. My life. It hurts.



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Hello all! My name is Alisa. I live to sing and to write. I am bisexual, if you have a problem with that, then please save us all the trouble and navigate away from this page. My style changes daily, .. more..

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