And You...

And You...

A Poem by FocusedAmnesia
"

Who would want to be 'the mistress'?

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And you,
Are the one who started this.
And you,
Are the one with the mood swings.
And you,
Are the one who doesn't know,
what they want.

So don't tell me,
That you're mad at me,
For something you shouldn't be mad for.
And don't tell me,
That it's my fault you feel this way.

Because I never,
Asked you to like me.
And I never,
Wanted anything from you.

So don't expect me,
To bow down to you,
As if I owe you something.
Because you're the one,
With the girlfriend.

© 2010 FocusedAmnesia



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Hello Sammie,

This is the story of my life, although I don't like to be refered to as girlfriend. Although I always wonder if I will be someone's girlfriend in prison. I like to think myself tough, but sometimes you have to do what you have to do.

Very honest with this write and curious how this turned outside of this screen that you are currently reading this on. But I am sure it turned out well for you regardless. Very well written. Excellent read.

Always,

Matthew

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Posted 8 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a very strong poem.

"Because I never,
Asked you to like me.
And I never,
Asked anything from you."

These lines are so loaded with emotion, and past. I loved it!

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Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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I feel very angry and betrayed after reading this - hit the nail on the head expressing the emotion of a bad relationship. Good job! :)

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Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Love the flow of the poem and the format that u used by emphasizing certain parts

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Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Great poem. I enjoyed your poetic flow. s

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Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is certainly a very sharp way to tell somebody off; it flows well with a kick-finish

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Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is SO good! I like how it ends.... it was an unexpected twist which i LOVED!!! It was awesome and I'm sorry if this literally happened to you! :(

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Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

brilliant and tightly woven thrust of reality into another's world~ the bold lines fit perfectly~ the brevity of each sentence imbued its effect with all the more power~ I adore the powerful stance taken by the narrator~ excellent writing!~

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Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow! I must say such short sentences, yet full of such emotion! Oh my, I must congratulate you on your way of ending this lovely work of art, 'Because your the one with the girlfriend.' Pure genesis love (:
- Skylar

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Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

just fire........tops!

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Added on July 26, 2010
Last Updated on September 25, 2010
Tags: You, Girlfriend, Mood Swings, Mad, Fault, Never
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