Pomise

Pomise

A Poem by FocusedAmnesia
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Promises. Are made to be. Broken.

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Promise me, promise.

Come morning, it is broken.
Promise me, promise.
One never to be repaired.
Promise me, promise.
Maybe you'll be forgiven.
Promise me, promise.
It won't be forgotten.
Promise me, promise.
I will not allow myself,
Promise me, promise.
Will not get hurt again.
I promise, promise.

© 2010 FocusedAmnesia



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I Like The Ending To This. Making Yourself Promise All These Was Enlighting.
Most Of Them I Think Would Be Good To Add Would Be This..

Promise Me, Promise
I Will Never Hurt (Or I Will Never Get Hurt)

But Thats Me I Like It Very Beautifully Done.

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Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Loved, loved, loved this. Repetitions are my favorite. They have so much impact. Really makes you feel the gravity of being let down again and again and again. Every time I read your work I think to myself: My god, this girl has been through a lot to be so young. You are a rising star, my friend.

Posted 8 Years Ago


I love the repetitions of "Promise me, promise." It was so lyrical, so impactful! (I know impactful is not a word, but it describes this piece well, hehe) I loved it. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I Like The Ending To This. Making Yourself Promise All These Was Enlighting.
Most Of Them I Think Would Be Good To Add Would Be This..

Promise Me, Promise
I Will Never Hurt (Or I Will Never Get Hurt)

But Thats Me I Like It Very Beautifully Done.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice. The repetition didn't seem forced, and the whole poem was sweet and light. I like it how you finally say that you promise yourself all these. Nice ending to a lovely poem.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on August 12, 2010
Last Updated on August 18, 2010
Tags: Promise, Broken, Repaired, Forgiven, Forgotten
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