Oh, Butterflies

Oh, Butterflies

A Poem by FocusedAmnesia
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Belly full of butterflies...

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A million and one
butterflies                      fluttering around
           wings flapping
       hundreds per second
I'm queasy
from the flittering
continuous                  circles they're making
 inside me
               my nervous belly
Oh, the things
                         that you do to me.

© 2010 FocusedAmnesia


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Very cute and sweet this poem is! I love the structure and the accompanying picture, very suiting. It has such a flippant and whimsical atmosphere about it, as though you're floating and bouncing around the poem while reading it which is thoroughly enjoyable. Well written!

Posted 8 Years Ago


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I really love the way you have set the text to resemble fluttering butterflies. Good job.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Behold the Magnificent power of love.
This was absolutely beautiful.

Posted 8 Years Ago


This is sweet

Posted 8 Years Ago


Very cute and sweet this poem is! I love the structure and the accompanying picture, very suiting. It has such a flippant and whimsical atmosphere about it, as though you're floating and bouncing around the poem while reading it which is thoroughly enjoyable. Well written!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A creative flutter of emotions and whimsy. Very sweet.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

beautiful, and well written artistic, and the form creates the feelling imo,
the fluttering effect, the imesg of butterflies play well into the romantic
theme as well as the classic emotion of nervousness in such ways
the reader can't help but feel the excited emotional implication
and the over design, brilliantly conceptualized work, keep it up!

Posted 8 Years Ago


happiness washes over me ! :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


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oh that feeling! Whether from love or lust or sheer nervousness..they are always there...nicely done

Posted 8 Years Ago


I like the written format of this poem. its really cute and sweet. love the last line.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Aw... so cute and sweet. I would switch flittering continuous to continuous flittering, unless you were going for an unbalanced affect to explain the butterflies in your stomach.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on August 19, 2010
Last Updated on August 19, 2010
Tags: Butterflies, Fluttering, Flittering, Queasy, Million, Hundred, Nervous, You

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