My Reservation

"I love you"

"That's a pretty strong  confession to make"

"It would only be strong if the feelings had only been fleeting"

"Fleeting you say, and these feelings are something more?"

"My heart beats for the moments our eyes meet, for the times you smile...yet" 

"Yet?"

"......yet I do not trust you, I see you waste your love with these girls"

"I-I guess..."

"Single nights giving your heart to them, yet tearing it away the second you're done with them"

"I don't know what to say..."

"Don't you see me, with the same eyes that you see the others?"

"I..."

"Am I not just another girl you can have your way with?"

"Please, I don't know what I'm supposed to say to you..."

"Say nothing, please just open your eyes and see me"

"What if I can't?" 

"Then let this kiss on your cheek be my reservation"

"Please, I-I can't do this with you, you're not like the others"

"Then don't?"

"Wha-what do you mean?"

"Open your eyes, and just see me"

Reviews

[ROSALIND]

Tragic untrustworthy of love heart breaking

[zainul]

Your skill in playing games is vividly reflected here.
I am so impressed to see that a thought process emerged as great poem :)
Thanks for sharing.

[Jazique]

I just want you to know I lovew that last line "Open your eyes, and just see me" because I believe the number one flaw, is to love someone and them love you but, their blind to because they never understood what true love was. Anyways I love the way you formated the dialogue to say what you wanted to say. Well done.

[Forgotten]

Yeah I agree with you, I'm really glad you enjoyed this :) Thank you for your review

[Dr. Wood ?]

powerful stuff, yet simple really, a shot in time..it reads almost like a painful letter written late at night when the inspiration police make their call

[Forgotten]

Close enough, this was written not long before I decided to sleep :P But I'm glad you enjoyed this

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Lovely dialogue poem with a whirl of emotions from the weak pleas of the man and the strong distain from the girl. Well set out and expressed.
One typo:
'Single nights giving you heart to them..' 'your heart'

[Forgotten]

Ah thank you for spotting that mistake =D Thank you for your wonderful review

[Rhianne Ney]

"Open your eyes, and just see me"

~ this line reminded me of a quote I picked up from somewhere which says: Love is blind, is that the reason, why you can't see me?

That alone is great and I think this one's sweet are you planning to create a story from this?

[Forgotten]

Thank you for your review, um I'm not sure really I have too many books I'm trying to work on so I'm not sure I want to add another one to the pile quite yet :P Maybe in the future though

[Rhianne Ney]

Right, sure. It will be hard if everything did pile up a lot. I've a lot of prologues and I don't know what to do already

[Frieda P]

I like the way you set this up as a conversation. Intriguing read, speaks to me of acceptance and trust.

"Open your eyes, and just see me"

Sometimes we can't see the forest for the trees as they say. Nice one.

[Forgotten]

Thank you for your review :) I thought about it for a while and I was going to write this differently but I went with the conversation so you could imagine where or what they could have been doing

[Coyote Poetry]

"Open your eyes, and just see me"
Some folks can't see the good things till it is too late. Good discussion led to a strong ending. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Forgotten]

Thank you for your review, I agree I myself had that in my life once, couldn't see what was right in front of me