Dark Disease

You treat me like a parasite,

A blood sucking leech within my own abode,

You think you have the right to call me irresponsible?

Take the cancer ridden fumes from your mouth,

Then you can look down on me!

How dare you treat me like dirt,

When the vermin is crawling under your own flesh,

You want to treat me like I'm a lesser being?

Then so be it!

I'll let the disease argue my case in the future.

Look at your frail body,

Destroyed by your own stupidity,

Crushed because your will power is but naught!

Speaking to me with coarse verses?

Wipe the tar from your cracked lips first,

See that?

Your body is losing the battle,

I'm irresponsible you say?

Look at yourself before you say it to me,

I told you the science,

I told you the facts,

You didn't listen so look who's laughing now. 

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

This felt like a purging of sorts...a beautiful purging. I find poetry that digs deep into the emotional wellspring the best kind. I feel your words and your images. I feel your depth and your clarity as if they were little pebbles I can hold in my hands. Well written and well shared.

[Forgotten]

Thank you, I like to make my anger clear as can be, make it easy to understand it :)

[Antoñyo]

Raw power in this read. Makes one want to know more of the source.

Thanks for sharing

[Moon]

So full of emotions , well done Forgotten .

[Forgotten]

Thank you, glad you enjoyed it :)

[Moon]

You are welcome

[Laminators Dubai]

great write....
some people think that others life is meaning less...but they dont know their life will be meaningless just by thinking that....

keep writing...

[MoriartyMesa]

Than only two things lacking are a smart slap across the face and a shot of Jack. I liked this.

[Cree Nations]

Wow...talk about getting the bitterness out. You did an awesome job of it. I actually felt your pain. It is not often I read words that give me such pause to think.

Thanks

[Forgotten]

Thank you, this was written with a lot of pain at heart, it's tough when the ones you love just don't listen to you. Thank you

[For Worse]

Okay, I don't know what it is about you, but I'm falling in love with your words. Absolutely amazing, as to be expected. Keep writing, I loved it.

[s y e]

"You treat me like a parasite,
A blood sucking leech within my own abode,"

Damn, those are powerful lines. Another powerful, deep write from you. I enjoy your writes, they're interesting and gripping. You have a interesting way of wording them. Good job.

[Forgotten]

Thank you I'm glad you enjoyed this one

[Skye]

Oh my... so much loathing, and anger. Resentment. A final backlash from years of mistreatment. I get the impression of a child taking care of their abusive aging parent.

[Mr Dunne Poetry]

This is a really good poem. Thanks for sharing :)

[Rhianne Ney]

Great. I love the way you placed your anger to lines, sine it helps for you to vent whatever was ailing you. As a fellow writer, I am amazed by the way you placed words prosperously. (:

[Forgotten]

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed this, it feels like anger but in fact it's frustration more so within the lines

[Rhianne Ney]

Yeah, (: I agree and you're welcome