Autumn Morn

It is awful hard to produce a review of a poem that is only three lines long and have it be substantial, so here goes nothing:
The first line "Autumn leaves fall free" has the obvious alliteration with 'fall free' as well as the cross reference between 'Autumn' and 'fall', which may or may not be needed for such a small poem, but overall doesn't detract in the least from the overall feeling of the piece.
The next line "my spirit rides with fall's breeze" is perhaps in need of a slight tune up. The reader already knows it is fall, and that the breeze would also be one of fall. However, the recovery comes with the third line: "crisp wind fills my soul", which is perhaps the most carefully constructed and beautiful line in the poem. This image is homeostatic in its resonance within the reader, as I don't think anyone (at least in my neck of the woods) could possibly ignore the feeling of lungs being filled with the crisp air of fall.
Overall, I 'd have to say that this poem is very well constructed and executed. For such a little treasure, it certainly carries its own weight.

Posted 2 Years Ago

Congratulations for winning the haiku contest!

Posted 1 Year Ago

Congrats on your winning poem. Great work

Posted 1 Year Ago

Nice depiction of fall. Early fall seems to bring a revival of spirit in moving on to the next season.

Posted 1 Year Ago

This makes me feel the joy I get when Fall comes with the changing of the seasons. I love the graphics of this piece. Thank you for entering the Contest. I am excited for all you Haiku lovers.

Missy

Posted 2 Years Ago

Beautiful!

jbk

Posted 2 Years Ago

I just freaked out on the poem and the picture.Its simply superb!

Posted 2 Years Ago

Absolutely beautiful. I love the picture, it is perfect. Beautifully penned. Great job.

Posted 2 Years Ago

Absolutely beautiful. I really like this one. Fabulous job!!!

Heather

Posted 2 Years Ago

It is awful hard to produce a review of a poem that is only three lines long and have it be substantial, so here goes nothing:
The first line "Autumn leaves fall free" has the obvious alliteration with 'fall free' as well as the cross reference between 'Autumn' and 'fall', which may or may not be needed for such a small poem, but overall doesn't detract in the least from the overall feeling of the piece.
The next line "my spirit rides with fall's breeze" is perhaps in need of a slight tune up. The reader already knows it is fall, and that the breeze would also be one of fall. However, the recovery comes with the third line: "crisp wind fills my soul", which is perhaps the most carefully constructed and beautiful line in the poem. This image is homeostatic in its resonance within the reader, as I don't think anyone (at least in my neck of the woods) could possibly ignore the feeling of lungs being filled with the crisp air of fall.
Overall, I 'd have to say that this poem is very well constructed and executed. For such a little treasure, it certainly carries its own weight.

Posted 2 Years Ago

Fran, wonderfully appealing to my senses...takes me, if only briefly, to my favorite time of year, allows me to feel the fall breeze, see the colors and hear leaves skittering along the ground. Very nice haiku.

Posted 2 Years Ago