Wildfire of Darkness

 

He watched the pouring pain from his
bedroom window, just before he took
his late night pills.
Misery took hold once more,tearing at
his already tormented soul.

Thoughts of dying invaded his mind,
not wanting to give in ,yet hopless to
reach that last remaining star which lit
the heavens.

The pounding rain kept tune with his
hammering headache,feeling tired and old
as he lie his weary head upon his pillow.
His gray thinning hair matched his grey
volumeless life,he thought, as he tossed
and turned,wishing for sleepy warm dreams.

But slumber eluded him and another sleepless
night would be his familiar compaion once more,
with tapping sounds of rain pelting out a lonely
melody of pain on his window pane.

He hated the pretense of what he seemed to be,
telling his friends he was blissfully happy, and all
was right in this life of his.

If only they knew the darkness, which pervaded
his very being.
If only he could let this deep feeling of gloom
within him go, and find that touch of magic he
once tasted so long ago.

But,, he could not escape his dark thoughts.
They ran rampant as wildfire soars to conquer
and spread deep inside his brain~
a wildfire of darkness,
he could not extinguish.

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

Heartwrenching emotions in every line of this one, Fran. Sleepless nights with only worries and stress to share his bed and then not telling his friends how he truly feels.....could be the script for a great movie! Very well written dark character study, Fran. Lydia

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'Wildfire of Darkness'
Fran Marie,
This piece was interesting in that it is a transference of the writers thoughts feelings into a character. Was your subject, the elderly and tired man someone real? It is like a little story told in third person. Funny I am saying this and am probably wrong. Oh well my thoughts. It is interesting that depression is just heavy sadness that can become such a dark and heavy cloud. Being busy, helping others and finding some kind of creative outlets can keep darkness at bay. People are complex and sometimes the darkness can win. I am trying to be optimistic but in all honesty it takes work much of the time through counseling and good friends and family. I have seen and known those who battle with bi polar, schizophrenia, suicide. It's just hard.
Jesus Christ has been and continues to be my strength and help and hope.
I like this because it gave me a place to ponder and think. Just me ya know.
Blessings,
Kathy

[Fran Marie]

No not about any personal man just about any man/ men in general..i do
appreciate your indepth review
on this 14 year oldie..thanks Kathy🌷

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Fran Marie,
I like reading older writing and it shows me the view of others as time passes. its interesting how the seasons pass and we find more life to share.
Bless you and hope your enjoying our pre spring.
Kathy

[EmpressPoetess]

Wow, Fran! I am left hungry for more of this! Your imagination is entensely vivid and very emotional! The realism of pain and dread can be felt and seem by the minds eye! Great job, Writer!

[SM Davis]

You paint a vivid picture here Fran. No surprise. All of your work is excellent. You are a diverse writer with an almost magical ability to draw the reader into the your characters mind and soul. This is no exception. Well done!

[Sarah Hawkinson]

Great read. it evokes an emotion not everyone truley feels. my favorite line was this one:
with tapping sounds of rain pelting out a lonely
melody of pain
I like how rain and pain echo each other.
and also how you used "pane" at the end of that sentence mixes well.

[Reaganwriter]

I really enjoyed this, i also liked it because... well there isn't an ending, nor is there a begining if you think about it, just describing his average painful nights. This will win something! Thanks for entering it.

[Emily B]

Oh, my. . . well done.

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

So sad. Well written

[AK]

Exactly what so many fear as they (we) grow older...

[Kaykay]

very sweet poem and very sad at the same time. what a nice way to say good bye to someone.

[Jenny Davis]

Wow! This is so sad, yet I feel that there is a great point in this...your descriptions were great in this as I saw this poor old man as he laid in bed, hopeless...extremely emotional and excellent write :)