DaRk CRimson BLooD

 

` Dark Crimson Blood `

 

My heart and soul
doth dwell in dark secret love
yes, a deadly affair stained in
dark crimson blood

'twas no victory won,
as vaults of heaven cried
my hand still frozen to the gun
as my lover's cold blood did run
in leaden rain drops died.

yet, no remorse had i
nor heavy heart to bare
and left him bleeding there
near fresh dug graves nearby.

the graveyard winds blew brisk
that dark, dreary, night
and the rain that fell
was marked by hell
as i ran in shivering fright

a bullet between his eyes
kept running thru~my mind
he had sworn in the name of
the Gods of Love ,he would
right our love and he'd be mine.

but his promises stood empty,
he would not leave his wife
now crimson blood runs down
his cheeks,and curls 'round
blue lips,oh, cruel, love unkind.

a dark sinister love so deep
and intense, such was ours,
hidden in a denizen of darkness,
clandestine~backstreet bars.

on dim-lit corners,stealing a kiss
in alley ways to embrace
no disgrace,nor shame,
always in rain,
the same sneaking game
a love without any stars.

'hell hath no fury like....
so i would murder him again
and put the bullet in thrice
and not think twice in my head
'Alas my dark secret love
lies in dark crimson blood
yes, cruel love so dead.

Reviews

[Cold Coffee Magazine]

I had to read the piece that beat out, "Scream for Ice cream" for third place in this contest. I can now see why, this is a fabulous piece and contains tons of visuals for something scribed one page in length. I think Scream may have been too long for this contest but with pieces like this running against it I'll have to do better than psychotic canabilistic clown to gross out the moderater.

Loved this. Reading it was like being in a laser light show, appealing to the ear and eye.

Dave

[Payton Taylor]

This is incredible :) Extremely well-written, and the imagery is fantastic. I seriously think this is one of the best poems I have ever read :) I hope you always keep writing, because you have a gift that not many people have, and it would be a shame not to see your talent put into action.
Keep up the amazing work!

[quill of shadows]

wow though im not saprized this kinda blows me away it has awsoe imagry and as always a vast amount of vioce and unlike most you flood your work with lots of jucy words well done and as always sarry bout spelling

[Harper Powell]

Amazing. you really painted a picture of a deranged lover killing a man who is torn between his wife and her. Its very well written. I like how u conveyed the message "Nothing is more fatal than the disaster of too much love" Your talent amazes me.

[funeralmoon]

This was like an old gothic love poem except without the love.. it was very nice.. very enjoyable to read :)

[Jenn Wathen]

interesting it really came to my mind its really different than for something i ever read.... my mom once said that love is cruel but war is love... which doesnt make since but yeah... really nice

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Congrats on your great winning poem.

[Sean M. Addams]

i really like this piece alot you never fail to amaze me with your talent another well written piece!!!

[Frances O'Neill]

Nicely written!

[Melissa Kesead]

Fantastic rhythm and verse. Very visual and captivating!

[Thanatos Darkraven]

This was good! I could picture everything that was going on in this poem. I loved the rhythm, the description, and how well the poem flowed overall. I'm truly honored that you saw fit to enter this work in my contest!