and we danced~

and we danced~

A Poem by Fran Marie
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..contest write. For Blue Rose cafe challenge

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and i danced..  as if in a hazy dream

    

                                    like a ballerina


amid lilac's heavenly scent, on a sunlit day


                

                                  and there you lie


in a pitch-black room, sad drowning in misery

 

                    and i danced over to your side


come love i whisper gently, take my hand



                                 and there i stood


waiting determined to break your mood


          and the smell of lilacs grew stronger


with an unpleasant odor



                                   and there you died


as i held your hand in mine


        and then in the black room shone a brilliant light


                                     

  and we danced~




                               

                                  



© 2015 Fran Marie



Author's Note

  Fran Marie
Just a dream that seemed so real

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A gay poem, a black poem, and a gayness amid the blackness. Have I read it correctly? Not to mention how much I love the scent of lilac.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Magical!
That is the feeling that came over me while reading your amazing poem! :)

Posted 5 Months Ago


a beautiful dancing poem!


Posted 6 Months Ago


  Fran Marie

5 Months Ago

thanks so much
This was such a gorgeous read. I love the hope at the end.

Posted 6 Months Ago


wow, you have a very beautiful style of writing. Loved this poem. Very well written. Good Job!! :)

Posted 7 Months Ago


  Fran Marie

7 Months Ago

Thank you for your lovely review.. i appreciate so mch😀
Oh. That's so beautifully written. You know, sometimes it's the style of writing that attracts. It's so painful to read yet so beautiful.
This expression has left it's impact on me. All I can say is you are such a graceful writer ♥❤

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Fran Marie

7 Months Ago

Thanks so vey much for the lovely comments on my poem.. i appreciate it..😀
I love the use of your words here. It sounds like a movie that should be made. I love the reference to lilacs, as I love lilacs. Great work, keep it up.

Posted 7 Months Ago


  Fran Marie

7 Months Ago

Thanks Regina soi much for the great review on my poetry. 😀
Regina Ann T

7 Months Ago

You are very welcome. I like to let people know that I enjoy their work, it also is a great motivato.. read more
Beautifully well putted. I felt write into it...(come love i whisper gently, take my hand) Superb, thank you!


Posted 1 Year Ago


  Fran Marie

7 Months Ago

Thank you for commenting on my poem..sorry i'm late with my thank you note.. i do appreciate it..
Silmara McGarry

7 Months Ago

No worries... And you are most welcome, Fran! ;-)
A very good poem that can not be predicted easily. I somuch appreciated the last four line. Well done.

Posted 1 Year Ago


  Fran Marie

7 Months Ago

Thank so much.. a little late but i so appreciate.it
Very interesting & surprising storyline here! I couldn't imagine what was coming, each step of the way. And when I got to the end, it all makes perfect sense. Awesome imagery, gracefully representing the sensations of dancing.

Posted 2 Years Ago


  Fran Marie

2 Years Ago

thanks so much..I so appriciate your reviews..

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