and we danced~

and we danced~

A Poem by Fran Marie
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..contest write. For Blue Rose cafe challenge

"

and i danced..  as if in a hazy dream

    

                                    like a ballerina


amid lilac's heavenly scent, on a sunlit day


                

                                  and there you lie


in a pitch-black room, sad drowning in misery

 

                    and i danced over to your side


come love i whisper gently, take my hand



                                 and there i stood


waiting determined to break your mood


          and the smell of lilacs grew stronger


with an unpleasant odor



                                   and there you died


as i held your hand in mine


        and then in the black room shone a brilliant light


                                     

  and we danced~




                               

                                  



© 2015 Fran Marie



Author's Note

  Fran Marie
Just a dream that seemed so real

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Beautifully well putted. I felt write into it...(come love i whisper gently, take my hand) Superb, thank you!


Posted 1 Year Ago


A very good poem that can not be predicted easily. I somuch appreciated the last four line. Well done.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Very interesting & surprising storyline here! I couldn't imagine what was coming, each step of the way. And when I got to the end, it all makes perfect sense. Awesome imagery, gracefully representing the sensations of dancing.

Posted 1 Year Ago


  Fran Marie

1 Year Ago

thanks so much..I so appriciate your reviews..
A real dream... A dream that's real... Nice one... Nice work... Nice Poet!!!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Beautifully written it seemed to describe what "hope" means to me (:

Posted 1 Year Ago


I see you still haven't lost your flare after all these years of reading your stuff....

PS...Cupid with an arrow.... you can figure out who I am... :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


  Fran Marie

2 Years Ago

Lol..yep.. still writing ..let me guess ..your name starts with a D..add an OST and if any are left .. read more
Bohrium Guy

2 Years Ago

;) minus spoken
Determined to break your mood. Powerful wording. Intriguing use of the lilacs symbol in relation to death.

Well done.

Posted 2 Years Ago


  Fran Marie

2 Years Ago

Thanks Philip;
so vey much appreciated;
A beautiful tale with a positive ending. The story reminded me of dear Grandparent. They loved to dance. I can see them dancing in heaven today. Thank you Fran for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


  Fran Marie

2 Years Ago

Many thanks, John; I so appreciate it..
Coyote Poetry

2 Years Ago

You are welcome Fran.
'.. sad drowning in misery - and i danced over to your side - come love i whisper gently, .. '

What a dream and what came from it.. glorious! Said before, you always take prompts in a direction all your own, then, lay them so graphically across the screen. Tis strange you add the scent of lilacs because have heard that the smell of lilac can wake the dead.. think Germanic derivation? Perhaps that's not wholly appropriate when talking of taking a person's hand and leading him into the glorious light of forever.. but..

Posted 2 Years Ago


  Fran Marie

2 Years Ago

Hmm, interesting about the lilacs...I did not know that..thanks for reading Emmajoy, I so appriciate.. read more
Aahhh....determined to break your mood.......such an apt description of those who are not flummoxed by our grumpiness and remain able to spread their light and love until we "turn".

Beautiful writing!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Fran Marie

2 Years Ago

Thanks so much for reading and for the review..much appriciated..

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